IELTS Essay task 2-Going overseas for university study is as exciting prospect

[Jt6112]

Hi Luschen,

Kindly evaluate this IELTS essay (the scale of 0-9) written by my brother. This is for IELTS general test.

Going overseas for university study is as exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it is probably better to stay home because of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in different culture.to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In recent studies, it has been observed that every year more and more students going in foreign universities. This number is increasing at an alarming rate because of infrastructure, facilities provided there and reputation across the globe.I agree with the statement.

Foreign universities are mainly known for quality education.They provide best facilities like a separate practical lab for each student, high-quality teaching staff, study related to industry point of view.Only top graded student could get the admission there. This will cause good atmosphere and healthy competition. If a student got an education in such kind of environment then that would be beneficial for them for their future perspective.

World class universities known for their names. Rather than searching jobs after completion of education, Student could easily get the high pay placement. As students known for their knowledge companies have more affection for the students from such university.For example in all IIT colleges, A number of students learn every year.Only because of the reputation of IIT always 100% high pay placement is there.

Due to the development of ideas in early age many more businessman, scientist, famous personalities got an education from such universities. That would be always beneficial for the society due to their work, thoughts and thinking ability.

On the other hand, if a student stays away from home, he /she will feel homesickness and became crave for their loved ones.This would be dangerous for their study and grade perspective. But I think these are minor issues.

To conclude, studying abroad has advantages like better facility, best infrastructure, and exciting career opportunities.

TOEFL listening discussions: Two seminar classmates discussing their classwork

[Luschen]

Hi, your thesis statement on this one was very confusing. That is why it is better to have a clear statement in the thesis itself, rather than “I agree with the former”
or “I agree with the statement”. You also had quite a few more unclear or awkward sounding phrases in this one than in some of your other essays. I think if you had acknowledge the prompt a little more explicitly in your introduction, your essay would have been easier to follow. Something like, “It is true that attending college in another country can bring many challenges, the great opportunities available in foreign universities make this an excellent choice for many students”

@Jt6112

Hi Luschen,

Kindly evaluate this IELTS essay (the scale of 0-9) written by my brother. This is for IELTS general test.

Going overseas for university study is as exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it is probably better to stay home because of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in different culture.to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In recent studies, it has been observed that every year more and more students [are] going [to] foreign universities. {or maybe better - “are choosing to attend foreign …”} This number is increasing at an alarming {alarming has a negative connotation, but I don’t think you mean it that way} rate because of infrastructure, [the] facilities provided there and reputation across the globe.I agree with the statement. {so you agree that it is better to study in your own country than to go to a foreign university?}

Foreign universities are mainly known for quality education.They provide [the] best facilities[,] like a separate practical lab for each student, high-quality teaching staff, [and] study related to industry point of view. {this last phrase sounds somewhat unclear} Only top graded student[s ] {or “students with extremely high grades”} c[an] get the admission there. This will cause [result in a] good atmosphere and healthy competition. If a student got{“gets” is better here} an education in such kind of environment then that would be beneficial for them for their future perspective. {“perspective” doesn’t really work here - maybe you mean “prospects”?}

World class universities [are] known for their names. {this sounds like maybe you mean the names of their students or professors - maybe “are known by name worldwide”} Rather than searching [for] jobs after completion of education, [a s]tudent could easily get [a highly paid] high pay placement. As students [are] known for their knowledge[, ] companies have more affection {“affection” is not suitable in this context} for the students from such universit[ies].For example in all IIT colleges[, a] number of students learn every year. {this sentence sounds pretty odd} Only because of the reputation of IIT[, there is] always [a ]100% high pay placement [rate] there.

Due to the development of ideas [at a] early age many more businessman, scientist, famous personalities got an education from such universities. {this is confusing - it sounds like you are saying because they had so many ideas when they were young, they decided to go to these universities} That would be always beneficial for the society due to their work, thoughts and thinking ability.

On the other hand, if a student [goes] away from home, he /she will feel homesickness and became crave for [contact with] their loved ones.This would be dangerous for their study and grade perspective. {“perspective” is not really correct here} But I think these are minor issues.

To conclude, studying abroad has advantages like better facilit[ies], best infrastructure, and exciting career opportunities.

TOEFL listening discussions: Two seminar classmates discussing their classwork