I wrote an essay for IELTS writing task 1. Can you give me feedback and estimated band score please?

[Torsten]

The question is if categorizations such as ‘employed’, ‘unemployed’ and ‘housewives’ are still useful. Also, how exactly do you define ‘leisure time’? Can anyone fully concentrate for several hours non-stop every day? Maybe in the late 1990 people were still trying to get full employment. By now, many have come to realize that a large part of the so called regular jobs are what Dr Graeber describes in his book as ‘bullshit jobs’. IELTS is an integral part of the bullshit job system that is trying to force us to contribute to the juggernaut. More on this here:

Are we living in a bullshit society?

I would argue that a lot of our societal values, rules and institutions are completely outdated and have not been able to keep up with the fast advancements in technology resulting in bullshit jobs. So my question is this: if a growing number of jobs are bullshit jobs, aren’t we turning into a bullshit society pursuing bullshit goals and living bullshit lives? Is the mantra ‘Nobody bullshits the bullshitter’ becoming the core principle of our being? Has capitalism come to an end being replaced …