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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
People who have an active lifestyle should balance different types of their life activities in order to be healthy both physically and mentally. Without sufficient physical training, one can become obese and consequently get cardiovascular diseases. On the other hand, one who obsessively do sports can get diseases related to excessive exercises, particularly joint problems. Additionally, lack of sports makes people depressed and passive. Taking this into account, a university should allocate budget in the way that maximizes students’ overall productivity. As a student, I understand an importance of sports and support an idea of funding students’ sports activities as much as it is done for university libraries.
First and foremost, we have to understand that sports activities such as swimming, soccer, basketball, tennis, etcetera improve students’ health, so that they are not distracted from their studying by illness or diseases. What’s more, being active in sports gives an individual advantages over regular students who follow mainstream lifestyle. For example, it’s well-known fact that sports facilitate process of studying due to an increase of the amount of oxygen supplying the brain. Moreover, some sports help to socialize with peers. This is important during adolescence period when people obtain essential social skills which they need throughout their lives. Team spirit, empathy and interaction with others are one of the examples of vital skills everyone needs.
However, it is not so easy for university administration to allocate the same amount of money for sports activities as it does for university libraries due to the shortage of a budget. For instance, many universities cannot afford funding of sports activities at all, except for several trainings per a month. For example, my university provides only one class of physical training a week. Besides, extensive sports activities can draw students’ attention to games and competition and distract them from their primary and main activity - studying.
Both lack of physical activity and excess of such activity lead to dissatisfaction and serious consequences in one’s health, but everyone needs to keep healthy. Thus, if a university is interested in healthy and prominent individuals, optimal allocation of budget should be a subject of thoughtful consideration. Conjointly with scientists, university administration has to decide how much sports students must have in order to be a successful in their studying.
Nowadays people are not required to be active physically, however, as many centuries ago, they still need physical training which has to be provided by social institution such as colleges, universities and schools.
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