Human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals

[naisargi]

Question: Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Wide range of activities can be performed on a single piece of land. Farming and cultivating new crops to provide variety of food to human beings; huge constructions can be undertaken to provide shelter to humans; Big industries can be opened up to manufacture things of daily living for humans. However, do we ever think about the animals who are part of our ecosystem ? Do we ever take into account that the land which is tool for our prosperity is home to thousands of species? Only knowing the answers is not enough. Not only we, selfish human beings, never take into account the tremendous losses to the animals but also we don’t really care about the animals. I strongly believe that it is more important to save the land for endangered animals rather that using it for satisfying the never ending human needs.

Firstly, animals form a very important part of our ecosystem. Each and every animal is a part of one or the other food chain. For instance, pig eats the cat, cat eats the mouse and mouse eats the tiny insects hiding in the burrows. If any one of the animal population is affected for any reasons the entire ecological balance gets disrupted. Unfortunately, the losses are not only limited to the animal fraternity, but they also extend to the humans as well. Many of the non vegetarians eat meat of pigs and when pigs get endangered, the food supply of those people relying on pigs gets disturbed. Thus, the same people now rely on plants which cannot fulfill the gigantic demands of the entire human community and food shortage crisis takes place.

Secondly, We, as humans, have an essential duty towards our mother earth that we have to return to the environment what we have taken from them . Saving the land for the endangered animals is one of the first step towards that journey. From time immemorial, humans have the tendency to take nature for granted and exploit the nature in every possible way for their own monetary benefits. This has led to deforestation, rise in temperature, global warming, lack of rainfall, melting of glaciers and has many devastating consequences. After all, all these changes has lead to long periods of droughts, floods, epidemics of diseases, tsunamis and bursting of volcanos. Only if humans begin to act upon such alarms, then only we can calm the fury of mother nature.

So, I think humans should stop their nature destroying activities and should consider the lives of millions of other species before establishing new factories or constructing big skyscrapers. More and more awareness programmes should be conducted by the government explaining the severity of the situation and encouraging humans to adopt nature friendly ways.

[Torsten]

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A variety of activities can be carried out on a single piece of land. Agriculture and the cultivation of new crops to provide people with a variety of food; huge constructions can be undertaken to provide shelter for people; large industries can be opened to produce everyday things for people. But do we ever consider the animals that are part of our ecosystem? Do we ever consider that the land that is the tool for our prosperity is home to thousands of species? Just knowing the answers is not enough. Not only do we, selfish humans, never consider the enormous losses to the animals, but we don’t really care about the animals. I strongly believe that saving the land for endangered animals is more important than using it to satisfy never-ending human needs.

First, animals form a very important part of our ecosystem. Every single animal is a part of one food chain or another. For example, the pig eats the cat, the cat eats the mouse, and the mouse eats the tiny insects that hide in their burrows. When one of the animal populations is affected for any reason, the entire ecological balance is disrupted. Unfortunately, the losses are not limited to the animal brotherhood, but extend to humans as well. Many of the non-vegetarians eat pork, and when pigs are endangered, the food supply of the people who rely on pigs is disrupted. Thus, those same people are now relying on crops that cannot meet the gigantic needs of the entire human community, and a food shortage crisis is occurring.

Second, we as humans have an essential duty to our Mother Earth, that we must give back to the environment what we have taken from it. Saving the land for endangered animals is one of the first steps on this path. Since time immemorial, humans have had a tendency to take nature for granted and exploit it in every way possible for their own financial gain. This has led to deforestation, rising temperatures, global warming, lack of precipitation, melting of glaciers, and has many devastating consequences. Eventually, all these changes have led to long droughts, floods, disease epidemics, tsunamis, and volcanic eruptions. Only when people start acting on such alarms, only then can we calm the fury of Mother Nature.

So I think people should stop their nature-destroying activities and consider the lives of millions of other species before building new factories or constructing big skyscrapers. The government should conduct more and more educational programs to make people realize the seriousness of the situation and encourage them to adopt nature-friendly ways.