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English as a Second Language English Vocabulary, Grammar and Idioms
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I would like you to review and correct this sentence for me

I would, therefore, like to have them enrolled on a TOT course focusing on “communications skills working with the public sector” which I will deliver myself given my broad knowledge and experience in this subject matter.

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Pretty good, I made a few suggestions

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Possibly, to be really picky, it would be a good idea to say: knowledge of and experience in …

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Alan,
‘I would therefore, like to have them enrolled in a TOT course focusing on “Communications skills for working with the public sector”, which I will deliver myself,
given my broad knowledge of and experience in this subject matter.’
Is it OK?

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Could any one help me?

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You don’t seem to have taken all Luschen’s earlier suggestions on board.

I would therefore like to have them enrolled on a TOT course, focusing on “Communications skills for/when working with the public sector”, which I will deliver myself, given my broad knowledge of, and experience in, this subject matter.

I’ve added two final commas because to me there is a natural pause there. I know others who would omit them. If you don’t use the prepositions ‘knowledge of and experience in’, then I would not use them:
… given my broad knowledge and experience in this matter.

By the way, ‘anyone’ is one word.