He felt excruciating pain - and then, he felt nothing

English as a Second Language English Vocabulary, Grammar and Idioms
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Hi

Could you please tell me how you find the given sentence as far as punctuation is concerned? Any correction would highly be appreciated.

1-He felt excruciating pain-and then, he felt nothing.

Tom

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Good morning, Tom

My personal opinion is the sentence just plain looks weird with “and then” preceded by a dash and followed by a comma. I think that punctuation would be more irritating than useful to a reader.

Amy

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Good morning, Amy. :smiley:

Thanks a lot.

How would you write this sentence?

Tom

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Hi Tom,

As the lady said:

He felt excruciating pain and then he felt nothing.

You could beef it up a bit like this:

He felt excruciating pain. Then he felt nothing.

or

He felt excruciating pain, then nothing

Alan