Grammar Mistakes in my story

hello ,

i wrote a short story about what happened to me in this page

a lot of my friend said that i have grammar mistakes in my story
can anyone completely , check it out and explain my mistakes

please paste that sentences that involve a problem here and say where the problem is

i feel good with this forum , i think i can learn a lot here

Hi Prisoner,

Could you please do us a favor and post those phrases or sentences you want us to review here on the forum? It’s rather difficult for us to copy and paste every single sentence from your website onto our forum.

Many thanks,

TOEIC listening, photographs: The freezer room[YSaerTTEW443543]

You mean i got too many mistakes ?

I think it depends on the purpose of your blog. What do you want to accomplish with it and who do you want to write for?[YSaerTTEW443543]

TOEIC listening, photographs: Walking in the snow[YSaerTTEW443543]

i want to write it for myself , but i want it to be clean and readable