First essay: Topic 74 the best ways to travel is in a group led by a tour guide

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Topic 74 :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people believe that travel alone is very exciting, cheap and so on, while others prefer to travel in a group for different reasons. Nowadays, some hold the opinion that “the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide”, but others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the statement. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

In the first place, what I put my priority in is safety. The fact is that almost of us travel for discovering new things, thus we usually choose a strange place which we have never gone before. This means that you will take risks which we can not predict. Therefore, in my opinion, traveling in a group led by a tour guide will help us avoid unexpected danger, because the guide is very familiar and experienced in there and he will show what we should do and what we should not do. Indeed, it is precarious if we travel alone.

As the second analysis, convenience holds no less important role. It can be clearly seen that we will waste a lot of time if we do not know about the landscape that we want to visit, because we must find out about the place and how to go to there. In a contrary, If we have a tour guide, the guide will help us resolve it quickly because he is accustomed to the site and deeply understand it. Consequently, we can save time to do other things and get plenty accurate information about the place we will visit. Moreover, the guide has a lot of experience to resolve our problems on the way to help us have a comfortable journey.

Last but not least, traveling in a group is very interesting, because we can to be accompanied on the trip by others people. On the way, members of group could talk together, help each others, and so on. This is not in travel alone.

All in all, travel in a group led by a tour guide not only brings many benefits to us, but it also is more safety and more interesting than travel alone. Obviously, I always choose group travel instead of individual travel.

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hi Kitos, it is my first essay i write in this site, please fix it for me. Thanks for your help.

Topic 74 :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people believe that travelLING alone is very exciting, cheap and so on, while others prefer to travel in a group for different reasons. Nowadays, some hold the opinion that “the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide”, but others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the statement. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

In the first place, what I put my priority in is safety. The fact is that almost ALL of us travel for discovering new things, thus we usually choose a strange place WHERE we have never BEEN before. This means that you will take risks which we (cannot) predict. Therefore, in my opinion, travelLing in a group led by a tour guide will help us avoid unexpected danger, because the guide is very familiar and experienced in there and he will show what we should do(,) and what we should not do. Indeed, it is precarious if we travel alone.

As the second analysis, convenience holds no less AN important role. It can be clearly seen that we will waste a lot of time if we do not know about the landscape that we want to visit, because we must find out about the place and how to go to there. ON THE contrary, if we have a tour guide, the guide will help us resolve it quickly because he is accustomed to the site and deeply understandS it. Consequently, we can save time to do other things and get plenty OF accurate information about the place we will visit. Moreover, the guide has a lot of experience to resolve our problems on the way to help us have a comfortable journey.

Last but not least, traveling in a group is very interesting, because we can to be accompanied on the trip by others people. On the way, members of THE group could talk together, help each other, and so on. This is not POSSIBLE WHEN travelLING alone.

All in all, travelLING in a group led by a tour guide not only brings many benefits to us, but it also is more safety SAFER and more interesting than travelLING alone. Obviously, I always choose group travel instead of individual travel.
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