Essay: The Character of the Society

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Hi kitosdad,
Your efforts have been appreciated, there is my another attempt plz check and evaluate the essay and even let me know about the theme i interpreted in the essay.
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The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes and heroines.

Character defines as “the aggregate of features and traits that form the individual nature of any person or thing.” It also relates to moral and ethical quality being a person. Therefore, the character of the society involves people, customs (culture), history, environment and various other physical and psychological aspects. Considering the example of American society, which is a mixture of diverse nationalities. Therefore there are different cultures involves but we cannot judge them only through the heroic point of view. Heroes are person of distinguished courage or ability and admired for their brave deeds and noble qualities. They alleviated by the society because of their own features and traits. However, the character of the society depends upon people who live in that society but not every person of the society can be a hero. Therefore, i disagree with this assertion to examine the character of people, as heroes, which needs understanding the character of the society.

Considering the story and life history of best golf player Tiger Woods, who has history of fame. He played as many tournaments as others and remained champion consecutively. He ranked higher among the successful golfers because of his achievements to date. He also signed endorsement deals with many companies and being the highest paid professional athlete. He established many charity and youth projects especially for the disadvantaged children. He has a foundation on his own name “Tiger woods Foundation” which focus on projects for children and there are many others. Along with, he has been named as “Athlete of the decades”, “Associated press male athlete of the year”, and “Sportsman of the year”. Talent and moral character have no formal connection at all. The most talented individuals can be morally horrendous. The justification is that the way people treat their vows and their spouses reveals important aspect of their character. That aspect appears to be negative and been effective for his fame. He forgot his values and traits towards his career and family and committed infidelity. His apology in front of media and public was a confirm distrust to his family. This also resulted in his professional loss as most of the companies broke their contracts with him. This donot means that the character of the society was not good who selected him as a hero. In the summit of his ambition, his personality created a thought of being selfish, extraordinary and supernatural.

Another example in this consideration is the Pakistani cricket player Imran Khan. He is a well-known cricketer in the whole world and an honorable world cup winner. Imran’s character was strong and passionate being a cricketer. He had founded a charity organization named Shaukat Khanum Memorial trust and established the charitable cancer hospital. He inaugurated Namal College in Mianwali District. He is also a UNICEF’s special representative of sports for different countries. He served his efforts as a politician and become a role model for youth. He could not get required success as a politician because of his character and personality. He married a British woman, but his marriage life could not survive and end up with divorce. There was an allegation about him for illegal relations and an illegitimate daughter. Society does not select these people as heroes that society itself ashamed of so as the character of the society could not be judged.

If we consider the character of media artists, their relations are also full of corruptness and distrust. They seem flourishing and brighten when seen on the red carpet but their personal lives are a full disaster. The best example to quote here is Britney Spears, the top singer and the seconed highest earning musician. She had history in music industry and made more than four albums. She also signed multi million dollars deal for different products and TV commercials. Her married life was full of immature decisions and non-compromising behavior. She got psychologically ill and admitted several times in the medical center. Her attitude towards her own kids was alarming which let her lost the custody of her kids. People do not appreciate such characters that just leave the message of distraction and unawareness.

The conclusion of all this discussion let me to reject the statement. The society is an economic, social and industrial infrastructure where varied collections of individuals are available. This does not represent the character of a person as a whole. Their lives good and morally active people as well as people of lose and demoralized character. Society supported those who have the ability to bring some innovations and creativity and their deeds prove them being a modal.

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The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes and heroines.

Character IS DEFINED as, “the aggregate of features and traits that form the individual nature of any person or thing.”
It also relates to THE moral and ethical quality OF a person. Therefore, the character of the society involves people, customs (culture), history, environment and various other physical and psychological aspects.
Considering the example of American society, which is a mixture of diverse nationalities. Therefore t There are MANY different cultures involveD but we cannot judge them only through FROM the heroic point of view.
Heroes are person of PEOPLE WITH distinguished OUTSTANDING courage or ability(,) and THEY ARE admired for their brave deeds and noble qualities.
They ARE alleviated RECOGNISED by the society because of their own features and traits. However, the character of OUR society depends upon people who live in that society(,) but not every person of the IN THAT society can be a hero. Therefore, (I) disagree with this assertion to examine the character of people as heroes, //which needs understanding the character of the society.???//

CONSIDER the story and life history of THE best golf player Tiger Woods, who has AN history of fame. He HAS played as many tournaments as others and remained champion consecutively. He ranked higher among OTHER successful golfers because of his achievements to date. He also signed endorsement deals with many companies(,) and IS the highest paid professional athlete. He established many charitIES and youth projects(,) especially for the disadvantaged children. He has a foundation IN his own name(,) “Tiger woods Foundation” which focusES on projects for children(,) and there are many others.
Along with THIS(,) he has been named as “Athlete of the decades”, “Associated press male athlete of the year”, and “Sportsman of the year”.
Talent and moral character have no formal connection at all.
The most talented individuals can be morally horrendous.
The justification is that the way people treat their MARRIAGE vows and their spouses reveals important aspectS of their character. That aspect appears to be negative and HAS been effectivED BY his fame. He forgot his values and traits towards his career and family(,) and committed infidelity. His apology in front of THE media and public was a confirmED distrust BETRAYAL OF his family. This also resulted in his professional loss(,) as most of the companies broke their contracts with him. This doES not mean that the character of the society WHICH selected him as a hero was not good.
AT the summit of his ambition, his personality created a thought of being selfish, extraordinary and supernatural.

Another example in this consideration is the Pakistani cricket player Imran Khan. He is a well-known cricketer in the world and an honorable world cup winner. Imran’s character was strong and passionate being a cricketer. He had founded a charity organization named Shaukat Khanum Memorial trust and established A charitable cancer hospital. He inaugurated Namal College in Mianwali District.
He is also a UNICEF’s special representative of sports for different countries.
He served his efforts as a politician and becAme a role model for youth. He could not get THE required success as a politician because of his character and personality. He married a British woman, but his marriED life could not survive and HE endED up DIVORCED. Society does not select these people as heroes. that society itself ashamed of so as the character of the society could not be judged.

If we consider the character of media artists, their relations are also full of corruptness and distrust. They seem flourishing and brighten when seen on the red carpet(,) but their personal lives are full OF disaster. The best example to quote here is Britney Spears, the top singer and the second highest earning musician ENTERTAINER. She HAS A history in THE music industry and HAS made more than four albums. She also signed multi million dollars deal for different products and TV commercials. Her married life IS full of immature decisions and non-compromising behavior. She BECAME psychologically ill and WAS admitted several times inTO A medical center. Her attitude towards her own kids was alarming which LED TO HER losING the custody of her kids. People do not appreciate such characters that just leave the message of distraction and unawareness.

The conclusion of all this discussion LEAD me to reject the statement. The society is an economic, social and industrial infrastructure where varied collections of individuals are available. This does not represent the character of a person as a whole. Their lives good and morally active people as well as people of loOse and demoralized character. Society supported those who have the ability to bring some innovations and creativity and their deeds prove them being a modEl.
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Good morning Nazeedzia, this work started off as interesting, but the longer it went on the more puzzling it became. Try to keep your work clear and concise. Do you really think you could write all of this in thirty minutes?

Kitos. 7/10

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Hi kitosdad,
Thanks for the response. Actually, i am practicing writting the essay and my emphasis is to write clear english with examples and the use of vocabulary. But i am still making mistakes. I am actually not writting the timed essay.
I did not get your point
"but the longer it went on the more puzzling it became"
is my writting really confusing. Plz explain me where i need attention.
Thanks in advance.
nazia

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Good morning Nazeedzia. It became puzzling due to your introducing more and more characters.
Only NOW do you explain that you are practicing your writing and vocabulary. Well, surprise, surprise, so is everyone else here.
Perhaps it would have been better had you submitted your work as three or four seperate essays, all following the same theme, but emphasising the weakness of each personality.

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Hi kitosdad,
good criticism.

Perhaps it would have been better had you submitted your work as three or four seperate essays, all following the same theme, but emphasising the weakness of each personality.

If i am understanding ur statement correctly, do you mean that i should both agree and disagree with the given statement.

The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes and heroines.

In agreement of this statement i can quote examples of Martin luther king , Mother treasa, bill gates and many more.

Actually tiger woods issue was new and was in discussion and it was related to my topic too so i decided to disagree with the statement.

I once more want to clarify that please let me know should i both agree or disagree with the given statement because i have to attempt some other topics and if your answer is yes then i will follow the same strategy.

waitting for your response.
nazia[/b]

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Good morning Nazeedzia. It is usual to be asked to state positives and negatives at the beginning of the topic. If you are not asked to do so, then simply choose one or two personalities and concentrate on them.
It is almost impossible to find a real “hero” today. Almost every “hero” in the spotlight of human interest has ultimately been exposed by their private behaviour, be it alcoholic, drug user, wife beater, cheat, homosexual, even within Royalty and the church.
If the negative side to a “hero” is common knowledge, then reveal this weakness as part of your essay.

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Thanks kitosdad, your efforts have been appreciated