Some famous athletes and entertainer earn milions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salary? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
[color=darkblue]Society often thinks that some famous athletes and entertainer earn such high salary but I don’t think so. I always remember a quotation written “There is no such thing as a free meal.” We always envy others because of their fame, their success, their wealth and so on and forget that they had also exchanged many different valuable things to gain all these reputation.
Basically, I don’t think that famous athletes and entertainer just play around and then suddenly they become a wellknown person with such high salary. I assume that first they have to possess a special ability in their field, and second they have had do a plethora of exercises and were trained through a plenitude of training courses. For instance, a football athletes very famous all over the world today is Ronaldo. How can he becomes a famous athletes with millions dollars a year if he cannot plays such football very well under a huge of gazes from viewer around the world and only running during 45 minutes without interruption? These facts prove that he has a good skill and he had trained very hard.
In site of the fact, famous artists such as athletes and entertainer earn such a dreamed salary, they have been lost an innumerable worthy things in their lives. The famous get away their personal space, private time, and even their love from them. Whether they efford to hold these things by money or not, they still get away their reach. For example, Whitney Houseton, the deceased diva which her talent is wellknown all over the world. Since a glorious life and a meaningless life along with the fame bring to her, change her life, she had lost her direction and overdosing drug to death.
Therefore in my mind, I don’t think famous athletes and entertainer earn such high salary. I think they have a salary that equals to what they had exchanged and what they had spent. They had lost their peaces for this salary, so it is no matter with their momey.
Hi Deathangel, I enjoyed reading your essay. Your structure is very good and your arguments are clear and convincing for the most part. You have some verb tenses I would change, but your sentence structure and vocabulary are both adequately complex. I like how you used a multitude of synonyms for “many”. Unfortunately, you had a few sentences that were real “head-scratchers” They really sounded awkward and confusing. It is a shame because most of your essay was very good, but these errors I think were blatant enough to bring your rating down to to a3.5 out of 5.
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Society often thinks that some famous athletes and entertainers earn too high salaries, but I don’t think so. I always remember a quotation written “There is no such thing as a free lunch.” We always envy others because of their fame, their success, their wealth and so on and forget that they had also exchanged many different valuable things to gain all this fame.
Basically, I don’t think that famous athletes and entertainers just play around and then suddenly they become a well known person with an extremely high salary. I assume that first they had to possess a special ability in their field, and second they had do a plethora of exercises and were trained through a plenitude of courses. For instance, a football athletes very famous all over the world today is Ronaldo. How could have he become such a successive athlete with millions dollars a year if had not been able to play football so well under a pressure atmosphere of millions starring from football fans around the world? Besides that, I assume that he had trained very hard for running constantly during 45 minutes without interruption.
In spite of the fact that famous artirsts such as athletes and entertainers earn an immensely salary, they have lost innumerable worthy things in their lives. The famous takes away their personal space, private time, and even their love from them whether they efford to keep holding these thing or not. For example, consider Whitney Houston, the deceased diva whose talent has been confirmed all over the world. Since a glorious life that the fame bring to her, she had started feel her life is meaningless. Then she’d lost her direction and starting overdoses drug to death.
In conclusion, in my mind, I don’t think famous athletes and entertainers earn such a high salary. I believe that they equally exchange this salary with what they had possessed and what they had spent. Fairly be said that they deserve their money they had earned.