Education is the single most important factor in the development of a country. Do

[Alice3105]

[b]Education is the single most important factor in the development of a country. Do you agree?[b]

For many developing and developed countries, education is a root of achievement. Education produces a skillful and intelligent generation that will be a future ruler for the country. Moreover, if civilian have been trained with efficient education, they will have adequate life. Therefore, Education is the fundamental for the development within a country due to brilliant generation breed by it.

Student is expected leader of a nation. For the very first thing, student absorbs basic knowledge and develops skills in school and then university. They are the ones, who will inevitably become a future doctor, an ulterior architect and also president of a nation. Moreover, education armed students with fundamental wisdom and perception of worldview. The equipment of knowledge, which allows students to be conscious of human rights as well as their own interests. An instance, with supplied knowledge of political, student can promote the democracy government by giving their voice on policies, including both domestic and foreign.

Education is a dose for economic stability, which comes along with standard of living. Tuition gives a citizen opportunity of finding a moderate career. For example, high education will promise profession for citizen who stays at school long enough to earn it. A professional career gives people decent income that allows them to strive for many other demands. Therefore, they can increase the gross domestic product by supplying it. Furthermore, when people have stable income, they will be willing to pay tax revenue. The more taxes are collecting, the further advantage for the development of a country.

Education delivers knowledge for student and citizen. Education creates opportunities for people to have a profession or a career. Eventually, these jobs will lead to economic stability, which is the key for developing a nation. Obliviously, education is the exclusive and the most efficient form to approach lasting development in long-term.

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TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two university students who met on campus

[Luschen]

Hi, your essay is not too bad. You have addressed the question correctly and your reasons are relevant and convincing. You have a lot of small grammatical errors though, especially with your singular/plural usage and your verb tenses. You also have quite a few words which have been used incorrectly. I think you may be stretching a bit too far, which makes your writing sound very unnatural. Overall, I would rate this a 3 out of 5.

@Alice3105

[b]Education is the single most important factor in the development of a country. Do you agree?[b]

For many developing and developed countries, education is a root{“foundation” is better here} of achievement. Education produces a skillful and intelligent generation that will be a future ruler {a generation cannot be a ruler - a member of the generation might though} for the country. Moreover, if civilian[s ] have been trained with efficient education{“efficient education” sounds a bit odd}, they will have adequate life.{“adequate life” is unclear} Therefore, Education{no caps} is the fundamental for the development within a country due to brilliant generation breed[“bred” - but that still sounds odd, education does not breed children} by it.

[A] Student is expected [to become a] leader of a nation. For the very first thing{is this the first thing a student does or the first thing you are going to talk about? it is unclear}, [a ] student absorbs basic knowledge and develops skills in school and then university. They are the ones,{no comma} who will inevitably become a future doctor, an ulterior{“ulterior” is correct here} architect and also president of a nation.{you are comparing a plural with singulars - say doctors … architects … presidents} Moreover, education arm[s ] students with fundamental wisdom and perception of worldview.{“perception of worldview” sounds odd} The equipment of knowledge, which allows students to be conscious of human rights as well as their own interests.{this is not a complete sentence} An[For] instance, with supplied knowledge of politic[s ], student[s ] can promote the democra[tic] government by giving their voice on policies, including both domestic and foreign.

Education is a dose {“dose” sounds odd here, maybe “recipe” or “prescription”} for economic stability, which comes along with [an increased ] standard of living. Tuition gives a citizen opportunity of finding a moderate{“moderate” is unclear here} career. For example, high[er] education will promise [a ] profession for [any] citizen who stays at school long enough to earn it. A professional career gives people decent income that allows them to strive for many other demands.{“strive for demands” sounds odd} Therefore, they can increase the gross domestic product by supplying it.{supplying what? it is unclear} Furthermore, when people have stable income, they will be willing to pay tax revenue. The more taxes are collect[ed], the further advantage for the development of a country.

Education delivers knowledge for student[s ] and citizen[s ]. Education creates opportunities for people to have a profession or a career. Eventually, these jobs will lead to economic stability, which is the key for developing a nation. Obliviously, {oops! obviously} education is the exclusive and the most efficient form to approach lasting development in long-term. {this last phrase sounds unnatural - say “to achieve lasting development in the long term”}

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TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two university students who met on campus