Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for

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Topic - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I completely agree with this statement that games are important for adults as they are for children’s. Children’s plays game for entertainment but adults can plays games for relaxation, relief as well as for entertainment. Playing games are useful for mentally as well as physically. Actually, we all know that in our fast going life many people comes under depression or stress, playing games are one of the most best and true option to overcome this problems.

Admittedly, children’s are enjoying playing most as compare to adult and they played many games which adult people not able to play, but there are many games which adult can play and enjoy their time. I strongly believe that games are important for adult as they are for children’s. Indoor games like poker, chess, Carom, Table tennis etc. adult can easily play and get relaxed. There are lots of problems in everybody’s life whether it’s related to money, family, job, relationship etc. but by playing games with their friend or family they easily overcome these problems and get relaxed.

Secondly, playing game not only useful for to overcome burden or stress but also it builds relationship with the other people. Game like chess is very useful to increase our thinking and thought. Puzzling game is also useful for to improve our mathematics as well as communication skill. Poker is also improving our thinking to identify probability.

Finally, the most important is a heath issue. Games are important to maintain our heath and heath related problems. For examples, games like table tennis, badminton etc. are help to maintain our body. Many Doctors suggest patients to play game, especially those who have very stiff body.

In conclusion, Games are very important for adults to overcome their health issue, stress problems, depression etc and it is the one of the best entertainment source as well.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two university professors

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Dips, it pleases me that you will follow my suggestion. You will find many articles written on this Forum to help you. Concentrate of the content and structure of sentences. Forget everything else for the moment. Only concentrate on sentence structure and content.

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