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English as a Second Language Preparation for and help with the TOEFL® Test and
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Hi Mr Luschen, thank you for the useful comments and I tried to use them in the following essay.But I still have difficulty in managing the time. I wrote this in 40 minutes. could you please give me some advice in how I can finish my essay in 30 minutes. Also I don’t know when should I compare two choices. Thank you in advance.

Undoubtedly, computers and new inventions such as internet have revolutionized our world. Some people say that computer have changed our lives in a negative way and
believe that the stressful life that people experience nowadays, is a direct result of vast-prevalence of computers at homes and workplaces. On the other hand, many
believe that the progress and convenience in life for many individuals, is due to inventions of computers and their vast usage. From my perspective, I believe, computers and internet have had positive effects on people’s life and have made their lives easier than the past. There are several reasons for my point view.

First of all, individuals save time using computers. Nowadays, communications are easier and faster through internet compared to the past, particularly in far away
distances; students can learn a variety of knowledge by taking related online course and avoid wasting transportation time and stuking in traffic jams for hours. In addition, people save time by doing their day-to day work through internet. for instance, we can shop on-line, check our banking account through internet, register for an educational program from home using internet, and so forte. In my own experience with this wonderful device, I can see my parents who live in the other side of the Earth, my country, several times a day using Skype or other social sites. This was unimaginable in the past. In fact, it took about 19 hours flight to reach to my country. However, the invention of computers and internet has made people closer. in other words, Physical distances between people has been eliminated in one way.

secondly, scientific progress is faster than the past because of the computer use. Researchers can simulate their hypothesizes and examine their thoughts. This is
a valuable opportunity for science, since researchers can not only save time, but also examine their information and observations in different ways using animation software and three dimensional technology. For example, biologists simulate different parts of animal’s bodies in order to study them thoroughly. for example, they study lion’s teeth and how they are used to sophisticate their preys by picturing and simulation their bodies on computers. Moreover, smart people have opportunity
to explore the virtual word and learn many beneficial skills through reading and watching scientific programs and sites .
In conclusion, I believe, computers have been very beneficial to people and have provided a much better life for them. People save time and learn a variety knowledge from difefrent scientific sites.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two university students (2)

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This is another example of a subject line that is not meaningful.
You should edit it so that it reflects the essay but fits into the allotted space. That is a skill which may prove useful to you in the future and which would certainly improve your knowledge of English. Why would you work hard on an essay and then show a distinct lack of care and attention to details by giving it a poor subject line?

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Hi Fameri, the best advice I have to increasing your writing speed is practice, practice, practice. You will not have to think about your format and structure as much and can focus more on the content. The other advice is to try to write detailed personal examples to support your reasons. To me, it is much easier to write about a specific event, lets say a trip I took to the beach, than writing about why vacations to the beach are fun in general. A TOEFL prep website I trust also says that writing an essay with two very well developed body paragraphs is better than trying to write three body paragraphs that are not really fleshed out, but you have already done this. I think your essay is quite good - your paragraphs have a lot of information and seem very convincing to me. I think your content would rate a 4, but you have quite a few minor errors in your execution that might reduce your score.

Edited - one more thing I forgot to add. I am not sure your second body paragraph addresses the prompt specifically enough. You say computers help scientific progress, but you are assuming that scientific progress makes life easier and more convenient. Maybe you mean easier for the scientists, but I think a more general reason or example might be better.