Do you agree or disagree?
In order to become responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
The childhood has a lot of contribution in shaping the future personality of an adult. The habits, taught during childhood remains constant as an adult. Moreoever, saving money is a very good habit for a secure future. Therefore, I agree that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
To begin with, children will have financial independecy in the future. At a young age, a child can use his money to buy his own neccesory things such as books, cloths and so on, so he has no need to rely on someone. As a result, a kid will learn how to be independent. For instance, I remember, as a kid my dad used to give me $5 every week as a pocket money. Regardlees of wasting it behind unneccesory stuff, I used to put them into my moneybag. When I enterd in my junior college, I had to pay 200$ tution fees for my dance class and I had to pay it instantly. I had no other options so i took money from my moneybag and paid my fee. In this way, I did not have to depend on my parents for one time because of my childhood savings.
Furthermore, children will be able to utilize their saved money in their rainy days. If a child learns to manage money, it will be helpful to him during future unexpected consequences. For example, my dad always thinks about the future plan and manages finance very carefully. Recently, my dad lost his job due to recession in his field. Fortunately,because of his prepalaned saving and his precautious nature, my family did not have to suffer from any financial burdren. He set an example to me and also tuaght me an important lesson. In this way, a child can learn and avoid financial load by unseen consequences by simply learning how to mange money.
All in all, if a child learn some basic lessons during childhood or at a young age, he will have more favourable outcomes in the future. Thus, I strongly believe that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Hi Kattie, I really liked your writing in this one. You sounded a lot more natural and had fewer errors than in most of your other essays. So I really wanted to give this a 4, but your second paragraph really doesn’t address the thesis much at all. Your example shows why it is important to save money, but it doesn’t talk about children managing their own money, which is the main point of the essay. Maybe you could have said that your father had to learn to manage money at a very young age and that is where he learned his valuable lesson to plan ahead for a rainy day. But as it stands, the grader might penalize you for not really sticking to the specific topic.