careful plans or not make plan when you have a trip

Topic: Some people prefer to plan activities for their activities very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for their activities. Compare two options’ advantage. Which options do you prefer?

     Activities are very important to human's life. Some people prefer to plan activities very carefully. Others avoid making plans Each of choices has its advantage. However, in my opinion, I choose the first option.

Firstly, careful plans equip people with standard knowledge about the destination they visited. To clarify, while doing a plans deliberately, we can select location that is beneficial to our life . For example, when I decide to visit USA, I can bypass Minnesota because the weather of this place is really cold that I can't withstand. Moreover, we can control our time to visit the whole country. For example, I spend two hours to visit Newyork, three hours to visit the Harvard university, and so on,.. So I can enjoy completely the diversity of USA's culture.

Secondly, not making plans also has its advantage. It helps people to anticipate unexpected experiences. My story can contribute to my examples.

Once in a time, I had a trip to visit USA just because I had a relative in Minnesota. After that, when I heard there would be a huge NBA basketball match, I delayed my initial plan to adapt my curiosity. As the result, now I known how fantasic a real basketball professional match was Obviously, a trip without plans enlarges my horizon a lot.

Thirdly, I think the second plan is better. In the first place, as I discussed above, although careful plans help us in making use of time, they limit our approach to unanticipated experience, in other word, limit our knowledge. In contrary, a trip without plans creates a freedom that I can release myself from schedule's rigid principles or restriction.

In conclusion, as I mentioned above, I strongly prefer a travel without plans

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Kaka, this is awful! Both your topic theme and first short paragraph are badly written.
How about you go back over them and try to improve them.

CAn you explain why the first and the second passage are awful, please Mr kitos

Topic: Some people prefer to plan activities for their activities very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all. for their activities. Compare the two options. advantage. Which options do you prefer?

Activities are very important to humans life in the life of every human. Some people prefer to plan activities very carefully. Others avoid making plans(.)
Each of choices choice has its own advantages. However, in my opinion I would choose the first option.

Topic: Some people prefer to plan activities very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for . Compare two options. Which do you prefer?

Activities are very important to human. Some people prefer to plan activities very carefully. Others avoid making plans. Each choice has its advantage. However, in my opinion, I would choose the first option.

Firstly, careful plans equip people with standard knowledge about the destination they visited. To clarify, while doing a plans deliberately, we can select location that is beneficial to our life . For example, when I decide to visit USA, I can bypass Minnesota because the weather of this place is really cold that I can’t withstand. Moreover, we can control our time to visit the whole country. For example, I spend two hours to visit Newyork, three hours to visit the Harvard university, and so on,… So I can enjoy completely the diversity of USA’s culture.

Secondly, not making plans also has its advantage. It helps people to anticipate unexpected experiences. My story can contribute to my examples.
Once in a time, I had a trip to visit USA just because I had a relative in Minnesota. After that, when I heard there would be a huge NBA basketball match, I delayed my initial plan to adapt my curiosity. As the result, now I known how fantasic a real basketball professional match was Obviously, a trip without plans enlarges my horizon a lot.

Thirdly, I think the second plan is better. In the first place, as I discussed above, although careful plans help us in making use of time, they limit our approach to unanticipated experience, in other word, limit our knowledge. In contrary, a trip without plans creates a freedom that I can release myself from schedule’s rigid principles or restriction.

In conclusion, as I mentioned above, I strongly prefer a travel without plans

I have correct my mistake. Can you read again and grade it for me, please? I promise you I will change dramatically by hard-working

Topic: Some people prefer to plan activities very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for . Compare two options. Which do you prefer?

Activities are very important to humans. Some people prefer to plan activities very carefully. Others avoid making plans. Each choice has its advantage. However, in my opinion, I would choose the first option.

Firstly, careful plans equip people with standard knowledge about the destination they are about to visit. To clarify, while making a plan, we can select a location that is beneficial to our life . For example, when I decide to visit the USA, I can bypass Minnesota because the weather in this place is really cold. That I can’t withstand. Moreover, we can control our time to visit the whole country. For example, I spend two hours to visit Newyork, three hours to visit the Harvard university, and so on,… So I can enjoy completely the diversity of American culture.

Secondly, not making plans also has its advantage. It helps people to anticipate unexpected experiences. My story can contribute to my examples.
Once I had a plan to visit the USA just because I had a relative in Minnesota. After that, when I heard there would be a huge NBA basketball match, I delayed my initial plan to adapt my curiosity. As the result, now I known how fantastic a real basketball professional match was Obviously, a trip without plans enlarged my horizons a lot.

Thirdly, I think the second plan is better. In the first place, as I discussed above, although careful plans help us in making use of time, they limit our approach to unanticipated experiences, in other word, limit our knowledge. On the contrary, a trip without plans creates a freedom that I can release myself from schedule’s rigid principles or restriction.

In conclusion, as I mentioned above, I strongly prefer to travel without plans
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This was definitely an improvement Kaka. Well done.

Kitos. 7.5/10

Thank you Mrkitos.