Better for children to begin learning a foreign

[Nayara]

Please, correct and rate my essay! - IELTS task 2

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Currently, speaking a foreign language is very important to get a good position in the job market. Because this, the experts discuss ways to improve the learning of a new language. It is frequently thought that people who start to learn another language very young they are able to achieve a better fluency. Therefore, child should begin studying a new language in the primary school instead of secondary school. However, some people think that it is not the best choice.

First, some educators support the idea that children should learn their mother language first and only then they should develop their skills in a foreign language. Thus, according to them, the secondary school is the ideal time to start to learn a new language. In order to support this idea, they claim that children might confuse the two languages and the development of their mother language might be compromised.

However, some experts believe that children have an amazing capacity of learning new things, therefore a foreign language should be taught to them as soon as possible. For instance, children that migrate to another country very early they learn the new language faster than their parents and some of them speak with a native accent. In addition, children in the primary school are able to dedicate more time to studying a foreign language than those who are in the secondary school. Owing to this, they have further developing of that language.

In conclusion, although some people point that children might get confused when learning a new language at primary school, the facility to learn when they are younger overweight the disadvantages.

TOEFL listening lectures: Which of the following is true of biological indicators?

[Luschen]

Hi Nayara, this seemed to be one of your better essays. You have some good ideas and your writing is very clear, though you do have quite a few errors in usage and sentence structure that would probably keep you from scoring a band 7.

@Nayara

Please, correct and rate my essay! - IELTS task 2

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Currently, speaking a foreign language is very important to get a good position in the job market. Because [of] this, the experts {this could use a few more words - maybe “experts often discuss” or “experts in the field of education discuss”} discuss ways to improve the learning of a new language. It is frequently thought that people who start to learn another language very young they are able to achieve a better fluency. Therefore, [a ]child should begin studying a new language in the primary school instead of secondary school. However, some people think that it is not the best choice.

First, some educators support the idea that children should learn their mother language {“mother tongue” is the common term - “mother language” sounds a little unnatural} first and only then they should [they] develop their skills in a foreign language. Thus, according to them, the secondary school is the ideal time to start to learn a new language. In order to support this idea, they claim that children might confuse the two languages and the development of their mother language might be compromised.

However, some experts believe that children have an amazing capacity [to learn] of learning new things, therefore a foreign language should be taught to them as soon as possible. For instance, children that migrate {“emigrate” is better when talking about people} to another country very early they learn the new language faster than their parents and some of them speak with a native accent. In addition, children in the primary school are able to dedicate more time to studying a foreign language than those who are in the secondary school. {why is this? this was a bit unclear to me} Owing to this, they have further develop[ment] of that language.

In conclusion, although some people point [out] that children might get confused when learning a new language at {“in” is better here} primary school, the facility to learn when they are younger overweight[outweighs] the disadvantages.

TOEFL listening lectures: Which of the following is true of biological indicators?