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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time
There is much discussion on the relationship between income and leisure hours. Some people like high-paying jobs that demand so much work time that little time can be shared with family and friends. However, others choose lower-paying jobs that give them more leisure time.
Admittedly, by earning more money, one is able to purchase more expensive things, like a large house with luxury decorations. The moment he get those, he may feel great fulfillment. However, an ironic question comes up to him immediately: does he have enough time to enjoy what he has earned? Just imagine that this person spend as much as 60 percent of his life on work, while the rest 30 percent is taken up by his sleep. Whether the house is large enough makes no difference to him, and let along the decoration — he has no time to appreciate it at all. What he really need at home is only a comfortable bed. Similarly, it is true that he has sufficient money to taste delicious foods in different restaurants, but only 10 percent of his life is left for eating, so that the only choice for him is the cheap fast food sold near his work place.
So people should ask themselves such a serious question, “What is the purpose of our hard work?” One of the most important answers is for a better life. Maybe sometimes people make less money with shorter work hours, but they have more free time to spend with their beloveds, to experience the best moments that life offers them. An ancient Greek philosopher said, “Happiness is doubled when shared with others.” With enough leisure time, they can watch sunrise at seashore with their lovers, or count stars at a mountaintop; they may eat a wonderful dinner at their little cozy homes with their family, chatting about amusing things. All these do not need much money, but a great deal of time.
Furthermore, family and friends give people vital emotional support. There are countless annoying things happening in everyday life. When people drag their heavy feet back home, the warmth of family help to dispel most of their tiredness and worries. Also, when they encounter frustrations, they can confide their troubles to their friends. The consolation and encouragement from friends will turn into strings of miraculous notes to disperse their uncomfortable feelings. With little time shared with them, one will bear more and more pressures and bitterness, and run out of powers eventually.
From what has been discussed above, in order to lead a meaningful and pleasuring life, I prefer a lower income job that gives more free time to me to spend with my family and friends.
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