A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your commun

A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position

Nowadays large factories are in all parts of the world, providing a variety of products for consume. Every factory bring advantages and disadvantages. Some people agree with the idea of building a new factory is a good idea, while other thing the opposite. In my personal opinion I agree with the idea because the advantages are more important.

A new factory is going to create new jobs in my community, which are a lot unemployment, some of the people have to leave their houses for looking better opportunities away, so if a large factory would built in my community it would help a lot of people by giving jobs. Moreover all factories pay taxes in the location where it is, even more if is large factory, providing monetary resources which may use to construct or maintain building which is used by people of my community such as recreational parks, libraries or others. For example, during my childhood I lived in a small town, where most of the adult people worked away, after building a large factory called Coca Cola which gave the opportunity, first during the construction gave jobs and them hire new personal to operate the factory, as well as the major of this town with the high taxes built a new sport center which served for the use of people.

In contrast, large factories pollute our environment, which is a problem for the quality of life of people whom live in a community, contaminated air can cause serious health problems in community people. In addition as the large factories require hire new personal, they come with their cars, therefore create traffic problems and noisy sounds on the street, affecting the quality of residents even more. For instance, I worked for several years in a large factory since the first day which arrived to a community, I heard some of the neighborhood whom was unpleasant because before arriving the factory, their community was peaceful, quiet and the parks were perfect to exercise, after establishment the factory people could not exercise because there was a lot of smog in air and everybody drove all the day.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that large factory their advantages can help a community, This is because, create new jobs and provide areas where people of an community can use for different activities. Based in my personal experience I thing that disadvantages that comes with the large factory may solve by using the taxes that factories pay.

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Nowadays we have large factories in all parts of the world, providing a variety of products for consumers. Every factory could bring advantages and disadvantages. Some people agree with the idea of building a new factory, while others think just the opposite. Personally, I agree with the former because the advantages are more important.

A new factory will create new jobs in my community thus reducing unemployment, as some people have to leave their home places in search of better opportunities elsewhere; so if a large factory could be built in my community it would help a lot of people by giving them jobs. Moreover, all factories pay taxes in the area where they operate, with larger factories paying more and providing monetary resources which could be used to construct or maintain such necessary for my community things, as recreational parks, libraries and others. For example, as a child, I lived in a small town, with most of the adult people working elsewhere; it all changed when The Coca Cola Company came there to build a large factory, first creating jobs during its construction then hiring new personnel to operate the factory. Our mayor has used the taxes obtained from The Coca Cola, to build a new sports center which still serves our community.

In contrast, large factories do pollute environment, which is a problem for the quality of life of the people living\who live in a community; contaminated air can cause serious health problems among people. In addition, new personnel hired to operate large factories means more cars, more traffic problems and more noise on the streets which could affect the residents. I remember working for several years at a large factory and from the first day of my arrival I heard some neighbours arguing their place had been peaceful and quiet, and the parks perfect to exercise before the factory was built. Since then the cars moving around all day long have produced smog and made exercising impossible.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that large factories have their advantages that can help\benefit a community. They can create new jobs and areas which people would use for different activities. Based on my personal experience, the disadvantages that come with a large factory can be reduced [problems solved] by using the taxes the factories pay, for the benefit of a community.

–You see the points you can improve on, don’t you? I advise you not go for lengthy explanations–make it shorter, especially when you’re not sure about the tenses. I believe it’s not about how many words you use in your essay—expressing your ideas clearly and convincingly is what matters. Logic must prevail.

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