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Article topic: Bishop Michael Curry's Radical Sermon at the Royal Wedding - The Atlantic
One month ago, probably all of us know the royal wedding of Prince Harry and Meghan Markle. It is the joy, pride of all the people of England and people from all over the world. But in addition to the prominence of the bride and groom in the royal wedding, there is also the presence of the bishop – a black bishop brings a Political Message to the Royal Wedding. The head of the Episcopal Church spoke about poverty, hunger, and war during Prince Harry and Meghan Markle’s nuptials. The political message is known to width in all domains of countries.
First of all, it was a fiery lecture on the power of love. The wedding of Harry and Meghan Markle on Saturday had a special flavor of the black church for it. And this quality representative, Bishop Michael Curry, head of the Episcopal Presidency, is part of Anglican communion with the Church of England. His address for the royals-filled room and the celebrities in Windsor Castle was political sophistication, calling for an end to poverty and war and citing American slavery and Martin Luther King Jr…
Indeed, poverty alleviation is a big topic in Curry’s lecture on Saturday - an amazing choice of topics for a luxury job often referred to as a sporting event. . Today is “not just for and about a young couple we are excited about,” he said. It is about love, which “can be sacrificed, and in doing so, becomes redemptive.” Poverty is not the typical theme for a wedding lecture. But they are typical of Curry, who has called for a “change of Jesus” movement and an extremely fierce preaching style.
In conclusion, all this is done for a mere celebration of the new duchess of England - a strong view of wealth and decentralization in the heart of the English throne.
Hi, nice work - here are my suggestions:
One month ago [Probably all of us heard about the royal wedding of Prince Harry and Meghan Markle one month ago]. It [was] the [pride and joy] of all the people of England and people from all over the world. But in addition to the prominence of the bride and groom in the royal wedding, there [was] also the presence of the bishop – a black bishop [who brought] a [political message] to the Royal Wedding. The head of the Episcopal Church spoke about poverty, hunger, and war during Prince Harry and Meghan Markle’s nuptials. The political message is known to width in all domains of countries. {this sentence does not make much sense at all}
First of all, it was a fiery lecture on the power of love. The wedding of Harry and Meghan Markle on Saturday had a special flavor of the black church [to] it. And this quality {“qualified” is better as an adjective here} representative, Bishop Michael Curry, head of the Episcopal Presidency, is part of Anglican communion with the Church of England. His address for the royals-filled room and the celebrities in Windsor Castle was [full of] political sophistication, calling for an end to poverty and war and citing American slavery and Martin Luther King Jr… {why did you use these elapses? }
Indeed, poverty alleviation [was] a big topic in Curry’s lecture on Saturday - an amazing choice of topics for a luxury job often referred to as a sporting event. . {this is confusing - what is the luxury job and what is the sporting event? this was a wedding} Today is “not just for and about a young couple we are excited about,” he said. It is about love, which “can be sacrificed, and in doing so, becomes redemptive.” Poverty is not the typical theme for a wedding lecture. But [it is] typical [for] Curry, who has called for a “[come to] Jesus” movement and an extremely fierce preaching style.
In conclusion, all this is done for a mere celebration of the new duchess of England - a strong view of wealth and decentralization in the heart of the English throne.
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