IELTS writing task 2 - food wastage

Hi,

Can you please rate my IELTS essay (Band 1 to 9).

Everyday, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think it is happening and how can we resolve the problem?

These days, wastage of food has been increased. I think events such as parties, weddings, birthdays and junk food offers are some of the reasons for this and it is our responsibility to save the food.

First of all, wastage in events is the main reason for this. A number of dishes are available to make events more enjoyable. Although many of them are not needed, to make parties more unique, a variety of dishes are made available. Because of unnecessary food, there is a wastage and this trend has been increasing across the globe. To save food, we should cook only the required dishes on such kinds of occasions. Additionally, it’s our responsibility to make aware of people to prevent food wastage.

Junk food is also one of the reasons for food wastage. Junk food offers to lure customers, and they can purchase unnecessary food from the market. Due to the quantity of these dishes, there is wastage. To prevent this trend, the government’s active involvement is needed. The government should imply stricter laws and fines should be levied in case of food wastage. If there are fewer offers, the attraction of people towards such kind of food would be diminished and resultantly, we can prohibit the food wastage across the globe. In addition to this, there must be awareness with the help of media, which can make people learn about the issue.

To conclude, fast food wastage has increased in the world. Events and junk food popularity are the main reasons for this. We can save the food with the help of active efforts from both individuals as well the government. All in all, to get rid of the problems both of them should walk hand in hand.

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Food waste has increased these days. I think events like parties, weddings, birthdays and junk food offerings are some of the reasons for this, and it is our responsibility to save the food.

First of all, waste at events is the main reason. There are a number of dishes to make events more enjoyable. Although many of them are not needed, a variety of dishes are offered to make parties unique. The waste of unnecessary food has increased worldwide. In order to save food, we should cook only the required dishes at such occasions. It is also our responsibility to make people aware of avoiding food waste.

Junk food is also one of the reasons for food waste. Junk food attracts customers and they can buy unnecessary food in the market. Due to the quantity of these dishes, wastage occurs. To prevent this trend, active engagement of the government is needed. The government should enact stricter laws and impose fines in case of food waste. If there is less supply, people’s attraction to this kind of food would decrease, and thus we can prevent food waste all over the world. In addition, the media must raise people’s awareness of this problem.

In conclusion, fast food waste has increased in the world. Events and the popularity of junk food are the main reasons. We can save the food with the help of active efforts from both individuals and the government. All in all, both sides should go hand in hand to solve the problems.

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Hi,

Thanks for your valuable response. Could you please advise on which parts do I need to focus on to achieve band 8?

Thanks

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What you can do is find articles that cover topics that interest you. Read them and work with them. For example, you can paraphrase parts of the articles, you can read the articles aloud and record your voice to memorize the text even better, you can share parts of the article that you particularly like here in the forum, etc.

Try to focus on what really interests you. Don’t focus on IELTS because it’s an outdated, hierarchical system that has no future. Remember that you can only learn if you enjoy what you are doing, if you are really passionate about the activities you are engaged in. Please don’t tell me that you are enthusiastic about IELTS :wink:

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