Which would you choose: a high-paying job with long hours that would give you little time with family and friends or lower-paying job with shorter hours that would give you more time with family and friends? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details.
It is clear that people should earn some money in order survive. Unfortunately some prefer to earn sheer numbers of money even though they get little time to share with their family. From my point of view, it would be better to gain low wage providing that offering more time to spend with family.
For a start, we can purchase many things with money but we cannot buy fortune for the family. To put it another way, money is nothing except a piece of paper and we should not rely on that. We should concentrate more on cheering our family up and money has little to do with the happiness of family. For instance, a friend of my father implements business. He makes an untold number of money but the problem is that he travels a lot within countries because his job requires it. Logically, he rarely sees his family. His parents do not seem to be happy. So do you think his family deserves it?
Secondly, it is no doubt having well-bred children is the wish of every parent. But in order to achieve it parents should allocate more time for their children. Otherwise parents may face serious troubles. For example, the cousin of my father is very rich. He is a merchant and earns a lot of money. He spends most of his time to transporting goods. He has not leisure for sharing with his family. His son is sixteen years old but believe it or not he acts as if he is a child. The main problem is that his parents spend less time to foster their children and they do not direct him. As a corollary, their son became unconcerned and in order to improve him parents encounter with some difficulties.
To sum up, before making a lot of money people should take their children into account. It is said that parents our first teachers. Parents should instruct their children otherwise the future of their children is under question.
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