well ,hi , this is my first to write something in here , if somebody happen to re

well ,hi , this is my first to write something in here , if somebody happen to read my essay , I will appreciate your advise . Anyway ,I will try my best to seek any chance to improve my writing skill .and I’m happy make friends with you !
Spend your earned money immediately or save it for future ?

People always happy about what they have earned by working , some people prefect to spend it all at once ,while others, like me ,want to save it as planned for future use .

First of all ,we will never tell what would happen next , so saving money means we can use it when emergencies .For example ,in today’s society , we can never deny that medical fee has become one of the biggest financial problem a family faced with . If one has a surgery or even some little health problem , that saved money can be a great help .Especially it has become a impossible thing to borrow a great of money form colleagues .

Except that , saving money is also a good way to increase the number on our bank account . Taking a example ,nowadays ,we could find out that white-collar workers have become more and more aware of the importance of saving money . They shuttle between banks or stock markets .and it turns out that some people who excel to manage finances finally make a fortune .

In the end ,if we use up our earnings immediately ,we couldn’t find extra money to support our future family . Reports and news have always come into us that an increasing number of the 80’s generation have to depend on their elderly parents to support their own family .Those poor parents struggled for years and years would have enjoyed the rest of their lives but failed to have to spend all the savings they have to help their sons or daughters. everyone should feel sad about the news .One of reasons why it would happen that is because our new generation lacking of sense of responsibility and have no idea of saving money .

As I mentioned above, it dose that we can use some of our earnings to enjoy our life , however , just keep in mind that do not spend it all immediately , save it for your future is a moderate way for your future life .

TOEFL listening discussions: Why does the student visit the registrar’s office?

Hi Sabrinayaa,

Welcome to this forum :slight_smile: Please check your punctuation before posting an essay next time. Also, you should focus more on your grammar and vocabulary. I can see a lot of repetitions as well as structural mistakes in this one. Besides, some of your sentences are lack of connections with each other. I think you’d better spend some times reading essays of other students here. It’s also a good way to improve your writing skill.

Your essay still has a lot of mistakes. I’m a student too so I can’t guarantee to correct all of them. Just keep writing :slight_smile:

Sincerely yours,
Giang.

Hi
Thank you for your kindly help . Writing is also my weakness . your advice help me a lot . I am a student ,too .But you have a better understanding of English than me .I will try to keep practicing . so will you .

Good luck !

Sabrina, please keep in mind your punctuation. If you keep typing like that in an exam, it will lower your score. When I talk about punctuation, I mean you should only put an extra space after punctuation marks like a full stop (.), a comma (,), a colon (:), a semicolon(:wink: and the like. Instead of

It should be like this

Hi,
Thank you for your kindly help. Writing is also my weakness. Your advice helps me a lot. I am a student, too. But you have a better understanding of English than me. I will try to keep practicing. So will you.

Good luck!

Please be more careful because improper punctuations can irritate your readers and stop them from reading to the end of your essay. I hope you would do better next time :slight_smile: By the way, pay more attention to capital letters too.

Gianglp:

Hi

Honestly , I never pay attention to the punctuation , and always ignore the importance of punctuation . I will pay more attention to it . Capital letter is another problem to me ,because of my carelessness .

Thank you!

Hello Sabrina,

You don’t seem to have paid attention to Gianglp’s good advice about punctuation even though you say you will pay more attention to it. Get into good habits now!

Oh , I think I didn’t get it .is it right now ?
Hi

Honestly , I never pay attention to the punctuation and always ignore the importance of punctuation . I will pay more attention to it . Capital letter is another problem to me because of my carelessness .

Thank you ! :slight_smile:

It still isn’t correct. Look at the writing of others.

The full stop, etc. follows immediately after the word. There is not space between them. The space comes after the punctuation mark.

Let me try it again~ Thank you for your patient~
Honestly, I never pay attention to the punctuation and always ignore the importance of punctuation. I will pay more attention to it. Capital letter is another problem to me because of my carelessness.

That’s what I’m talking about :slight_smile: Good work, Sabrina. Keep that good habit!

I will ,thank you

Sadly not, it seems. :frowning:

how learn i told english languse?

come on, don´t be so hard on her… repetition is the key here.

Exactly -

Someone who keeps repeating the same mistakes simply embeds those mistakes in the mind.
Someone who repeats good practice, learns good practice.

When we are actually talking about those errors and she is saying that she will try to do something about them, you would expect that to be a focus. Actions speak louder than words.

I like " action speaks louder than words" :slight_smile:

Hi,
Thank you!

I appreciate you! I am trying! :slight_smile: