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Topic11: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries.
I agree that universities should give the same amount of mones to their students’ sports activities. This is because universities can provide their students with good environments to do sport, and may be famous if their students’ sport-teams win in some sport tornaments. Moreover, sport is important thing as well as libraries for many students.
First of all, universities are able to provide students with various good environments for sports. For example, they can employ exellent coaches. If a famous coach instructs students, they will grow rapidly and strongly. In addition, universities can purchase better instruments, too. Most students don’t have money to buy expensive instruments. Therefore, giving them to students is very significance.
Second, if universities provide students with various enviroments for sport activities and students make more effort, universities would have opportunities to become more famous. This is because if their students’ teams become the strongest of all other universities, they can win in sport tornaments many times. It leads the students’ team to be famous, of course, their university too will be known by many people and become familiar. Therefore, a lot of high school students pay attantion to the university and the applicants for university will increase. This is benefit to universities.
Third, many studetents are interested in sport as well as study. Some students enrolled at universities to develop their sport abilities more. That is, it means that sport is very important factor at students’ university lives. Making students’ lives better is universities’ duty. Therefore, if universities don’t give the same amount of money to students’ sports activities as well as their universities, it is unfair.
Today, because it has been depression in the world, it may be hard for universities to give a lot of money to sports activities. However, the money is very worth for both universities and students. For these reaosns stated above, I agree that universities give the same amount of money to students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries.
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