computers and laptops have made huge impact in the todays world, people are ends up in doing more work from home which basically comforts them a lot and balances them in both personal life and official work.
Another biggest problem has been avoided while doing work at home, traffic, everyday people have to face this issue, as a result it affects the work productivity , this can be avoided by doing more work from home. For employers also, They have to spent cost much for logistics charges and this can be avoided by providing employees more work from home.
Smartphones have also changed today’s communication world completely, in a decades ago, communication was too difficult from one part of the world to another part of the world which has been changed drastically after introducing smartphones, which are allowing people to communicate with any part of the world whenever and wherever.
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I’ve changed your subject so that it is spelled correctly, though it is not really a very helpful subject as it doesn’t give any idea what your message is about. You could have given it the subject line ‘Modern Communication’ for example.
I don’t think a blow by blow correction of this writing is going to help you very much, as I’m afraid there are so many errors. I would like to say well done though, as you have been able to communicate your meaning overall, which is something to be proud of. It is a big achievement.
One of the biggest problems is the fluidity because you are not breaking down what you say into single thoughts - which can then become simple sentences.
As an example, let’s take a look at one of your longest phrases:
Another biggest problem has been avoided while doing work at home, traffic, everyday people have to face this issue, as a result it affects the work productivity , this can be avoided by doing more work from home.
You have written this as one sentence, but it needs to be broken down further:
One big problem for people travelling to work is traffic.
People have to face the issue of travelling to their place of work every day. (Note that ‘every day’ is two words here’ ‘everyday’ as one word means ‘ordinary’.)
Travel time affects productivity at work.
If people are able to work from home, this avoids the problem of commuting to work and the resulting loss of productivity.
So I have four sentences where you wrote one. I can still join them into a paragraph of course:
One big problem for people travelling to work is traffic. People have to face the issue of travelling to their place of work every day. (Note that ‘every day’ is two words here’ ‘everyday’ as one word means ‘ordinary’.) Travel time affects productivity at work. If people are able to work from home, this avoids the problem of commuting to work and the resulting loss of productivity.
I think you should focus on making grammmatically correct sentences like this before you move on to more complex writing.
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Thank you.Please suggest on other two sentences. is that grammatically correct?
computers and laptops have made huge impact in the todays world, people are ends up in doing more work from home which basically comforts them a lot and balances them in both personal life and official work.
Smartphones have also changed today’s communication world completely, in a decades ago, communication was too difficult from one part of the world to another part of the world which has been changed drastically after introducing smartphones, which are allowing people to communicate with any part of the world whenever and wherever.
They have similar mistakes in that they are overlong and so have grammatical errors. This is why I indicated that to correct everything would not help you. The entire thing would be changed. Try splitting them into shorter sentences.
A sentence always begins with a capital letter and ends with a full stop or equivalent punctuation mark such as a question mark or exclamation mark. It must contain at least one verb, and initially it would be wiser if it contained just one idea or thought.
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