TOEFL essay: Not everything is learned is contained in books

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It has been said, “Not everything is learned is contained in books.” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? Use specific examples and reasons to support your answer.

I feel that the question is asking me to say which eye I like most. I mean that it is difficult to say whether books are important or experience is important. I would rather explain that both are equally important. The knowledge gained from books as well as experience is required for advancement in life.
In the early stages of life the mind is not well developed to understand the circumstances. When a child falls down while walking, he would stand up and try again the same thing. In this situation if we say use the knowledge of experience, the child should never try to walk again. At such early stages, the knowledge obtained from books would be helpful in developing the child. The knowledge from books would form the basis for his development.
After certain stage of life, when people can understand what is good and what is bad, experience comes into scenario. The saying, “Experience makes man perfect” exactly fits to this situation. With experience people would gain knowledge which would help them predict the consequences and take measures to handle the outcomes. For example if a theory says decreasing the prices would attract people, one can’t apply the theory continuously even if it fails. In this situation experience would help that person come out with some other way such as changing the design of the product which would attract more number of people.
To conclude, I would like to mention that both the knowledge from experience and the knowledge form books would help a person progress through his life smoothly. The knowledge obtained from books forms the foundation on which a perfect house can be build with the knowledge of experience.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor of History

Hello Jsrijkc,

Many thanks for your essay. You have got some wonderful ideas. I think the essay topic asks you to choose which source is more important to you. Whereas, in your essay, you stated that both of them are important. I advise you to list the advantages of both of them separately, and then choose which ons is important on the basis of which one has more advantages. Another thing to mention, try to be clear. To do that, imagine that you are writing to a kid not to a professor. In this way, you will simplify things and therefore make them easy to understand.

Take care.


Thanks for correcting my essay.

Nice comments. I will try to improve my writing.

I didn’t understand one thing. Should we not support both of them when a question is asked for one important thing?

I have just started practicing for the essays.

Thanks again

Hi Happytofita

Can u please tell me about my organization, use of words and other fundamental requirements about the essay I have written.

I want to improve it as much as possible.

Thank you so much.