TOEFL essay: Art, music, drama should be a part of every child’s basic education

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Subjects such as art, music, and drama should be a part of every child’s basic education.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Education is always an important part of our life, espeacially education fof children. And in my opinion, art, music, and drama should be a part of every child’s basic education because of many reasons.

First, art, music, and drama is likely games of almost children, they can take part in these activities easily. These activities can help them increase their creative abilities which is very important for them in school and life later. And children who are educated with these activities can be more confident, clever, and smart. Example, a child who can sing alone can stand and talk about his/her ideas before the crowdswhen they grow up.

Second, with this program, we can teach children how to think themselves and to slove their problems. Art can help them to think and explore their opinions, first by pictures they draw. Then, music can help their mind is more relaxing and they can feel the beauty basicly. And drama teaches them to act, to work in group and to marge their abilities which they have learnt from art and music.

Third, we can find out some genius from teaching them art, music, and drama. Many genius in many areas have been discovered by this program. The earlier we find them, the more effectively we can help them to promote their talents.
Finally, art, music, and drama may be the most effective way to help children who are mentally deficient. By contacting with art, lisenning to music, trying to sing some easy songs or play a part in some fairy tales plays can help them to be better.

Totally, teaching chidren with art, music, and drama can be the best way in education for chidren that we should take.

Please correct my essay. Thank you so much.

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