The unnecessity of homework


#1

Would you mind helping me correct the essay about the topic below? Thank you very much.

Topic: Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

The benefits of homework has been debated by teachers and parents for years as the very word evokes very negative connotations to every involved, students, parents and teachers. Although many people think of homework as doing more harm than good by causing copious amounts of unnecessary stress to everyone, others believe that it has great advantages for children by encouraging them to think more independently outside the classroom. In my opinion, I concur with the former for three primary reasons.

First and foremost, the reason is that children are under enough pressure at school. The school day lasts for six and a half to seven hours, depending upon the local authority. During that time, children are taught a wide range of subjects and their brains are stretched. They need time when they go home to unwind, and have some quality time with their family and friends before getting a decent night’s sleep. Giving them additional work just places unnecessary pressure and stress on them. Teaching staff are also not available to offer guidance at home.

Secondly, children benefit from playing. Being in a classroom can be a good thing, but so can being on a playground. With too much homework, a child doesn’t have enough time to play and that can impact their learning and social development. Low levels of play are associated with lower academic achievement levels, lower safety awareness, less character development, and lower overall health.

Lastly, there are too many opportunities to cheat .With most families enjoying unrestricted access to the internet, the answers to most homework questions are just a click away. Giving work to do at home simply encourages young people to cut corners and search for the answers online. Because internet access is restricted in schools, kids have to work harder for the answers. The practice is an outdated one and teachers and schools need to find a way of moving with the times.

To sum up briefly, homework can be very stressful on a students’ life. It is unhealthy for young people like ourselves to undergo so much stress. Night after night staying up late and not getting enough sleep because we have so much homework to complete. One more time again, daily homework is unnecessary for students.


#2

Hi Phuong, I thought this essay was really excellent. The only thing is is really missing are topic sentences that refer back to the prompt. Each topic sentence should mention homework, otherwise it is not clear enough to the reader what your paragraphs are discussing. I have given you some suggested topic sentence modifications below. Also, it looked like part of your last sentence got cut off? I think with these small changes, this essay would score at the band 7 level.


#3

I’m convinced that the conventional idea of homework assignments doesn’t have a future.