The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing.

The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children’s health.
To what extent do you agree with these views?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.

In this modern society, the pursuit of healthy and nutritious foods are largely taken over by the craving for fast, convenient and delicious meals. As a result, obesity is forming its way around people, especially in children, who do not treat themselves rather cautiously. Some blame the growing trend in fast food outlets such as McDonalds and KFCs, while others suggest that parents may be responsible for their children’s obese. In this essay, I will examine the two sides of views and state what I think personally.
As we all know, the proliferation of fast food business has been speeding its way up and is still continually broadening throughout the world. As popular as it seems, such companies emphasize greatly on the food’s appearance and taste, which causes children to overweight consequently. Nevertheless, if more lectures and talks about such health issue can be given to a community, a vast amount of people will alter their habit in eating, both in adults and children.
Another common factor some intend to blame for resulting in overweight children is their parents. If parents set good roles for their children and restrict them from buying fast foods, such difficult issue can be addressed much more easily.
All in all, in my opinion, I support the idea of both reasons for the cause of obesity in children. Thus, great effort has to be put in order to reduce the climbing number of overweight children and should require the involvement of both parents and communities.

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In this modern society, the pursuit of healthy and nutritious foods HAVE BEEN largely taken over by the craving for fast, convenient and delicious meals. As a result, obesity is WORKING its way around people, especially children, who do not treat themselves cautiously. Some blame the growing trend in fast food outlets such as McDonalds and KFCs, while others suggest that parents may be responsible for their children’s obesITY. In this essay, I will examine the two sides of views and state what I think personally.

As we all know, the proliferation of fast food business has been speeding its way upINCREASING ALARMINGLYand is still continually broadening throughout the world. As popular as THEY APPEAR, such companies emphasize greatly on the food’s appearance and taste, which causes children to BECOME overweight consequently. Nevertheless, if more lectures and talks about such health issueS can be given to a community, a vast amount of people will alter their habit in eating, both in adults and children.
Another common factor some intend to blame for resulting in overweight children is their parents. If parents set good roles for their children and restrict them from buying fast foods, such difficult issueS can be addressed much more easily.
All in all, in my opinion, I support the OPINION of both reasons AS the cause of obesity in children. Thus, greatER effort has to be put APPLIED in order to reduce the climbing number of overweight children(,) and should require the involvement of both parents and communities.
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Keep ii simple Nancy, keep it simple. Avoid the overuse of unnecessary vocabulary.

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