The chart shows the reasons given by people who were asked in a survey about why

[color=darkblue][b]Hi kitosdad

please can you assess this essay.

Thanks in advance.[/b]

The chart shows the reasons given by people who were asked in a survey about why they moved
house. Write a short description of the pie-chart.

The pie chart above indicates the five causes that make people thinking of changing their homes.

First of all, the most significant reason of replacing their houses is relating to personal matters, the rate of divorce between couples which comprises just more than one third of the total percentage at 34%. then, in the second level, other matters are not mentioned, are the reason of 26% of reported cases.

The third considerable cause is because of the size of the property which account for 19% of entire percentage. while in the final, the job related cause is an efficient factor which constitutes nearly three times less than the personal reason does at 12%. The smallest percentage is a cause of turning to another house to find more comfortable one, this reason represents only 9% of the whole percentage of the statistic.

To sum up, the main cause of changing the home is due to personal issues, but the other reasons are almost can be regarded as sub-reasons.

TOEFL listening lectures: What is the main difference between a fad and a trend?

[color=darkblue][b]Hi kitosdad

please can you assess this essay.

Thanks in advance.[/b]

The chart shows the reasons given by people who were asked in a survey about why they moved
house. Write a short description of the pie-chart.

The pie chart above indicates the five causes that make people thinking of changing their homes.

First of all, the most significant reason FOR CHANGING THEIR HOMES IS RELATED TO PURELY personal matters(,) MOSTLY divorce AND MARRIAGE between couples(,) which ACCOUNT FOR MORE than one third of the total percentage at 34%.

Then the second REASON GIVEN IS FOR OTHER REASONS THAT ARE NOT GIVEN. HOWEVER; THEY ACCOUNT FOR 26%.

The third IS RELATED TO THE ACTUAL UNACCEPTABLE SIZE OF THE PROPERTY(,) IT BEING EITHER TOO SMALL, or too large. THIS REASON ACCOUNTS for 19% of THE TOTAL percentage.

FINALLY, job related REASONS ARE A factor which constitutes nearly three times less than the personal reasons at 12%.

The smallest percentage OF THE REASONS GIVEN is FINDING A more SUITABLE HOME(.) This reason represents only 9% of the whole percentage of the statistic.

To sum up, the main cause of changing the home is due MAINLY to personal issues, but the other reasons can almost can be regarded as sub-reasons.
:::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::
Good morning. Sorry for making so many changes, but it really needed them.

Good morning kitos, please do not say sorry, you really do a fantastic work by helping me and I apprciate it.

[color=darkblue] was this essay poor, can you assess it?

Sam, the score reflects just how poor it is.

Kitos. 6/10