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Topic: Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
If a person has no opportunity, one’s possibility of success is zero. Nevertheless, it is also difficult for someone to get success without planning carefully, no matter how many chances come to him. It will be more difficult when a well work-out plan is not going on as expected. At that time, an adventure in changing direction timely is very important to be able to achieve successful results. In other words, success is a combination between taking risks and making a scheme, namely.
First of all, a certain opportunity is one of the most important factors leading to success. Reality has showed that there are a lot of situations in which they cannot succeed due to lack of chances. For example, a graduate has a plan to open his own business, but his plan requires too many resources. However, if he cannot get help from others people, there is no chance for him to make his plan become real.
Secondly, being well-prepared plays a vital role in one’s success. Without a careful preparation, no one makes use of chances that they receive. Every year, hundreds of thousands of students try to attend to a desirable university or college. However, only those who have an effective studying plan and follow their plan until the last possible moment can get into universities or colleges they want.
Thirdly, simple recipe of success does not exist. I like story about one multimillionaire, who explain how he achieve his current status. He started from buying a box of cookies and sold them separately. Then he bought two boxes and sold all cookies again. After couple of iterations he received inheritance and become multimillionaire. It sounds pessimistically, but very realistic. In real life success is a matter of both factors. One can plan his business very carefully, but loses everything from extraordinary events. Thousands of small businesses disappeared every year because they were unlucky and they have been beaten in a competitive activity.
Finally, a person also can’t have the game in his hand if he does not change the original schedule when something unexpectedly happens. For instance, a fashion designer has a plan to organize a fashion show outside for his summer fashionable collection next month. The success of this fashion show depends on the weather so much because. It is held outdoors. Unfortunately, according to the forecast before a week, there will be rain on that day. So, choosing an indoor place instead of the old one is essential for him to run a fashion parade smoothly.
In conclusion, almost success starts from having a careful scheduled plan when a chance comes to, but when things go against the plan, it is necessary to find out another way in order to deal with it.
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