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【WRITING TASK 2
Write about the following topic:
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write about 250 words.】
My essay:
There has been a fierce debate over whether it’s fair or not that successful sports professionals earn a weigh larger amount of money than people have other significant occupations. Those who find it justified argue that sports professionals have devoted a great deal of time into their career before becoming famous. While others who hold the opposite views attribute the sports stars’ success mainly to their natural advantages. I’m inclined to believe it’s justified for the successful sports professionals to earn a good fortune as they have sacrificed a great deal to make everything happen.
Certainly, I strongly agree that many of the sports stars’ success is due to their unparalleled inherited benefits, such as the perfect height for a basketball player. In addition, it’s unfair to people in other important professions who probably have spent as much time for their career but make less fortune.
However, as far as I’m concerned, perfect height and strong body doesn’t necessarily make a successful basketball player. You can hardly name one player who hasn’t adopted rigorous trainings from an early age. The truth is, they have sacrificed much of their leisure time for practice, more importantly, injuries never abandon them. It’s truly justified when every one look at the diligence and the endless efforts they make, in addition to the superior physical conditions.
In conclusion, it appears to me that successful sports professionals earning much more money than other important professionals are justified to a large extent.
【WRITING TASK 2
Write about the following topic:
Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write about 250 words.】
My essay:
There has been a debate on whether the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect on the power of advertising or the real needs of the society. It appears to me that the former is more convincing as advertisements nowadays have dominated our daily lives and have had a significant impact on the purchasing decisions we make.
Those who hold the opposite viewpoints might consider that consumers nowadays are tend to be more mature and sensible towards buying stuff. They are inclined to purchase the goods that they genuinely need rather than be easily influenced by the commercials. Thus, the consumer goods that enjoy a high sales volume reflect the needs of the society to a large extent.
Strongly, I would argue that the huge power of advertising is the main reason behind the high sales of the popular consumer goods. Take myself as an example, no matter which street I stand on, in Shanghai, Hong Kong, Tokyo, or any other cities across the globe, I see non-stop commercials everywhere anytime. It seems there is a voice constantly echoing in my ear “buy, buy, buy”. And undoubtedly it has an impact on me, which propels me to purchase the stuff I don’t need. I firmly believe it not only happens to me, but to a lot of people. The truth is our business world is somewhat built on the commercials, making people buy more and then want more.
In conclusion, from my point of view, the tremendous power of the advertisements greatly result in the high sales of popular consumer goods. Certainly, I am also confident that there are still a number of sensible consumers who make independent decisions thus are difficult to be influenced by the commercials. Their choices could reflect the real needs of the society.
TOEFL listening lectures: A lecture from a social sciences class (2)