Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school.

Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your idea.

Some people might say that student should do physical exercise every school day while others may believe that student should only concentrate on their academic studies at school. In my point of view, I definitely agree that physical exercise should be a requirement for students every school day for several reasons.

First of all, as it is the fact that physical exercise is a necessary activity for people to stay healthy. Therefore, such activity should be set as the requirement at school for students. Nowadays, students may have a lot of activities to do after their school hour which may results in neglecting of physical exercise. Hence, implementing such activity in the school hour can promote the students’ health condition. To illustrate, most of students in my country need to go to tutoring schools every evening and finish around 8 – 9 pm. Thus, they become overweight as they keep eating without exercising.

Secondly, doing physical exercise not only promotes health condition of the student but with some team exercise can also help strengthen the relationship among players. Therefore, setting up the team sport activities will help student get together and eventually results in better of relationship. For example, during my high school year, I played soccer every morning before the class start which allow me to know many friends from the other class and we are still good friends today.

Finally, proper physical exercise can directly affect human emotion as Endorphin hormone will be secreted. Thus, doing exercise activity everyday especially before the class start can promote students’ emotion during school day which will help in concentration in the class. For instance, during my college year, it can be seen clearly that students who exercise frequently tend to concentrate and score more in the class.

In conclusion, even there is some controversial whether physical exercise activity should be a requirement for every school day. I totally agree with the idea of setting such requirement because of the reasons mentioned above.

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