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When we would like to buy something, we make a decision based on our need, qualification and price of product. However, sometimes we buy things that it really does not need because of advisements.
The advertising has a numerous influence on our decision to purchase. There are lots of attractions such as a presenter, a premium and an image. A presenter is the most importance of advertising .The first thing that catching people eye is a presenter especially who is a superstar because they already recognize him. A presenter has an effect on their decision because people admire him so it is easier to persuade them to buy even though it really not necessary. For instances; yogurt is not necessary for our health, but it has benefit to lose weight. A company has an advertisement their products by using the presenter who is slim and popular. Most of them are a fashion model or actress because they can convince people to buy products.
In addition, the advertising usually advertises their products by using image and premium. The image of product includes packaging and qualification. It is only changes packaging but the qualification is remain the same and the price is higher. It appeals people to buy .For example, a dishwashing liquid divided into two types. The first has no scent and the second has a lemon scent and its packaging look like lemon. Both of them have a similar qualification but the later is higher price. Some people will buy a lemon scent because of packaging. If they are considering a qualification, we should select the first type.
Moreover, a premium is one of the advertisements strategic to convince people to buy products. For example; there are two bands A and B. Band A has no a premium but band B has it. Most of people will select band A because of premium .They believe that it is more worthy although a premium do not need.
Advertising is a business strategic of making money by introducing and encouraging people to buy a product. Some products are not necessary but people have been convinced to buy products by advertising.

TOEFL listening lectures: A lecture from a marine biology class

When we would like to buy something, we make a decision based on our need, qualification and price of THE product. However, sometimes we buy things that WE really do not need because of advisements.
Advertising has AN ENORMOUS influence on our decision to purchase. There are lots of attractions such as a presenter, a premium and an image. A presenter is the most importanT PART of advertising .The first thing that catchES peopleS eye is a presenter especially who IF SHE is a superstar because WE already recognize HER.
A presenter has an effect on their decision because people admire HER so it is easier to persuade them to buy even though it IS really not necessary.

For instance; yogHurt is not necessary for our health, but it OFFERS THE POSSIBILITY to lose weight. A company has an IDEAL advertisement FOR their products by using the presenter who is slim and popular. Most of them are fashion modelS or actressES because they can convince people to buy products.

In addition, the advertisER usually advertises their products by using image and premium. The image of product includes packaging and qualification. It only changes packaging but the qualification is the same and the price is higher. It appeals TO people to buy .For example, a dish-washing liquid divided into two types. The first has no scent and the second has a lemon scent and its packaging look like lemon. Both of them have a similar qualification but the latTer is higher priceD. Some people will buy a lemon scent because of packaging. If they are considering a qualification, we should select the first type.
Moreover, a premium is one of the advertisements strategiES to convince people to buy products. For example; there are two bands A and B. Band A has no premium but band B has . Most of people will select band A because of premium .They believe that it HAS more worth although a premium IS not needED.
Advertising is a business strategY of making money by introducing and encouraging people to buy a product. Some products are not necessary but people have been convinced to buy products by advertising.[
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Really poor Groffy. It is evident that you have chosen to not read any newspaper or magazine in English. If you wish to waste your time, then by all means do so, but please don’t waste mine. There are people here who need help, and others who think they don’t.

Kitos. 6/10

I am not quite understand your comment. You mean that I had many error grammar in my essay whether I only expressed one sided of the advertisement.

What do you mean by the qualification of the product?

What is the premium?

Your sentence wording and structure are all wrong. Had you done any reading of English newspapers you would have immediately recognised some of the faults you were committing.

With the vocabulary you already have you could have made this an excellent essay, but you CANNOT structure your sentences properly, nor do you recognise you are using the wrong words to explain your opinion.

Please, if you read it again you would realise that you are wrong. If you can do it better, do so.
If you can’t, start reading some English articles to teach yourself sentence structure and spelling.

You are only holding yourself back by not doing so.