Some people like to do only what they already do well. Other people prefer to try new things and take risks. In my view of point, I am the person who like to do what I already do well. These are some reasons to support my choice.
When I was young, I used to play games such as Warcraft, Half-life, etc, but I played Warcraft best so I often played it than other games on my computer. I can’t explain why but I think becaue of my feelings. I just want to win and do not want to loose to other players.
Now, I have been working as an accountant for almost three years. It is not an interesting job because you need to deal with the numbers all day. In this company, I am well-paid because of my 3-year experience.A lot of people are jealous with my position in the company but noone knows my real feelings. I feel that I am just like a robot - doing the same things day by day. Sometimes, after working at the office, I go home and start shouting at other people although they do not do anything wrong. Then, I feel very terrible about myself because of those actions. So, I have two choices: studying and work in another major, or keep working as an accountant. At last, I have my own choice. But nothing changes because I keep doing my job now. I am not confident about myself. “I am quite old now and it is hard to find one job with the same salary for my living”, that’s my thought.
In conclusion, I’m not a go-ahead person. I just want to have a stable life till the end of my life. I know that is the common idea of a lot of people in the world. They do not want to risk their life now for something new and uncertain. That is why people like to do what they already do well.
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Some people like to do only what they already do well. Other people prefer to try new things and take risks. In my view of point(VIEW POINT), I am the(A) person who like to do what I already do well. These are some reasons to support my choice.
When I was young, I used to play games such as Warcraft(WAR CRAFT), Half-life, etc, but I played Warcraft(WAR CRAFT) best so I often played it than other games on my computer. I can’t (CANNOT) explain why but I think becaue of my feelings. I just want to win and do not want to loose to other players.
Now, I have been working as an accountant for almost three years. It is not an interesting job because you(I) need to deal with the(IGNORE) numbers all day(EVERYDAY). In this company, I am well-paid because of my 3-year experience.A lot of people are jealous with my position in the company but noone(NONE) knows my real feelings. I feel that I am just like a robot -(,) doing the same things day by day. Sometimes, after working at the office, I go home and start shouting at other people although they do not do(HAVE NOT DONE) anything wrong. Then, I feel very terrible about myself because of those actions. So, I have two choices: studying and work in another major, or keep working as an accountant. At last, I have my own choice. But nothing changes because I keep doing my job now. I am not confident about myself. “I am quite old now and it is hard to find one job with the same salary for my living”, that’s(THAT IS) my thought.
In conclusion, I’m not a go-ahead person. I just want to have a stable life till the end of my life. I know that is the common idea of a lot of people in the world. They do not want to risk their life now for something new and uncertain. That is why people like to do what they already do well.
A well written essay. Those are the few errors I was capable to trace. My observations are as follows;
Don not abbreviate. Abbreviations like “can’t” are not allowed in TOEFL essays.
I often have those mistakes like that because i used to have written test on page, not on computer.
I will remember this to make sure that i will not make those mistakes again.
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