Should a factory be built in your city?
Some people claim that our city still possesses so many factories, and pollution would be subject if new ones would be erected. However, from my point of view, I strongly believe that a new factory must be built, since masses of educated specialists and unskillful people are unemployed today. My reasons and examples listed below will strengthen my point of view.
First of all, city governors and authority lives and works in order to provide facile and comfortable life for our nation. Since we are recently established country, naturally, ample of people are unemployed. Among the possible solutions to this problem, I think that building a factory is the ideal one, since literal and untaught people can easily find a job here and satisfy their families’ demands. Moreover, as a matter of fact, vastness of people in poverty makes community to suffer from various problems. To put the discussion into a wider context, discrimination among wealthier and poor people is dominating. In fact, this is the most undesirable and unfavorable condition in a country. In short, I believe that a factory can alleviate the problems among people and it is able to reduce the number of jobless.
Secondly, besides the partiality among sectors, there is an immediate problem that people in poverty tend to be involved in robbery or criminality, in order to acquire some money to fulfill their basic daily needs. This is a miserable circumstance, and we must get rid of this as earlier as possible. Therefore, I think that a constructed factory means increase in number of workers, which would enable us to avoid from these unpleasant incidents, since as a nation such actions may compel us to deviate from our mainstream and delay our responsibilities and duties towards our nation.
To put in a nutshell, I believe that a factory can be a cure to our essential problems, since it can lessen the number of unemployed and lead us to establish an impartial community without unwanted happenings, such as theft or criminality.
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Should a factory be built in your city?
Some people claim that our city already has too many factories, and pollution from yet another one would only make the environment worse. However, from my point of view, I strongly believe that a new factory should be built, since masses of educated specialists and unskilled people are unemployed today. My reasons and examples listed below will strengthen my point of view.
First of all, city governors and authorities live and work in order to provide facile and comfortable life-styles for our nation. Since we are a recently developed country, there are lots of people who are unemployed. Among the possible solutions to this problem, I think that building a factory is an ideal one, since literal and untaught people can easily find a job there and satisfy their families’ demands. Moreover, as a matter of fact, the huge number of people in poverty makes our community to suffer from various problems. To put the discussion into a wider context, discrimination among wealthier and poor people is dominating. In fact, this is the most undesirable and unfavorable condition in any country. In short, I believe that a factory can alleviate the problems among people, as it is able to reduce the number of jobless.
Secondly, besides the partiality among sectors, there is an immediate problem that people in poverty tend to be involved in robberies or crimes, in order to acquire some money to fulfil their basic daily needs. This is a miserable circumstance, and we must get rid of this as soon as possible. Therefore, I think that the building of a factory means an increase in the number of workers, which would enable us to avoid these unpleasant incidents, since as a nation, such actions may compel us to deviate from our mainstream and delay our responsibilities and duties towards our nation.
To put my thoughts in a nutshell, I believe that a factory can be a cure to our essential problems, since it can lessen the number of unemployed and lead us to establish an impartial community without unwanted happenings, such as theft or criminality.
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Surprisingly good work Altunshukurlu. You progress with every essay. Please review.
Kitos. 8.5/10
thanks Kitos !! i will review it and send here … now if you don’t mind i want to send my 1st integrated essay here … waiting for your advicee
Should a factory be built in your city?
Some people claim that our city still possesses so already has too many factories, and pollution would be subject if new ones would be erected from yet another one would only make the environment worse. However, from my point of view, I strongly believe that a new factory mustshould be built, since masses of educated specialists and unskillful people are unemployed today. My reasons and examples listed below will strengthen my point of view.
First of all, city governors and authority lives and works in order to provide facile and comfortable life-style for our nation. Since we are a recently established country, naturally, ample there are lots of people are unemployed. Among the possible solutions to this problem, I think that building a factory is the ideal one, since literal and untaught people can easily find a job There and satisfy their families’ demands. Moreover, as a matter of fact, vastness the huge number of people in poverty makes our community to suffer from various problems. To put the discussion into a wider context, discrimination among wealthier and poor people is dominating. In fact, this is the most undesirable and unfavorable condition in any country. In short, I believe that a factory can alleviate the problems among people and ,as it is able to reduce the number of jobless.
Secondly, besides the partiality among sectors, there is an immediate problem that people in poverty tend to be involved in robbery or criminality crimes, in order to acquire some money to fulfill their basic daily needs. This is a miserable circumstance, and we must get rid of this as earlier soon as possible. Therefore, I think that a constructed(the building of) factory means (an) increase in the number of workers, which would enable us to avoid from these unpleasant incidents, since as a nation such actions may compel us to deviate from our mainstream and delay our responsibilities and duties towards our nation.
To put my thoughts in a nutshell, I believe that a factory can be a cure to our essential problems, since it can lessen the number of unemployed and lead us to establish an impartial community without unwanted happenings, such as theft or criminality.
full of mistakes, ha? 
… i want to ask something … ample,vastness,still possesses so, are this wrong?? i mean did i use them in wrong place?? or you just corrected it to make it simpler??
P.S : Mohammad it is for you
you just corrected it to make it simpler??
YES.
… i want to ask something … ample,vastness,still possesses so, are this wrong?? i mean did i use them in wrong place?? or you just corrected it to make it simpler??