Request to all the coaches

Dear sir/ madams, I’ll appreciate it very much if U completely modify this post and make it grammatical too. Thanks to all in advance for your feedbacks and advice.

“When I was a school-going kid, I wanted to become a renowned expert in electronics/ writer. But more than half of my life has gone, I have achieved nothing. Got married, produced a son, his mom passed away (of liver cancer) 14 months after giving birth. Now, I am useless. I am of nothing, neither here nor there. I am living my life without any hope to look forward to. I am dying slowly. Everyday is a real challenge for me. This is my life which I must accept though it’s not worth living. After all, I have no choice. Sometimes, I console myself, at least, I am alive and there’s someone who cares for me.”

Regards
Noren

Hi, I have made some corrections. Hopefully this is for a novel you are writing and not autobiographical.

Luschen,

  1. I got married, produced a son; his mom passed away (of liver cancer) 14 months after giving birth.
  2. I got married, produced a son; his mom passed away (of liver cancer) 14 months ago after giving birth.
    Can I rewrite #1 as #2.

Thanks a lot to you for the correction. One more request: can anyone make my post in an advanced way. Thanks.

No, #1 means she died when her child was 14 months old, we don’t know when in the past this happened. #2 means she died 14 months before the present time, probably right after she had her baby, but that part is not completely clear.

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Dear Toresten sir,
Thank you very much for correcting me all the time.

Dear Luschen,
Thank you very much for your help. I mean to say though it’s grammatical or not " She passed away when the son was 14 months old. “By the way, can U completely modify my post using advanced English words without altering the meaning.” Thanks to you.

Noren

Attention: Luschen
Are you in Nashville, Tennessee or in one of the places of UK? I prefer American English to the British one.

Hello Mentors,

While reading, I have come across a confusing phrase. “She passed away when the son was 14 months old.

What is the difference between 14-month old and 14 months old?

Is it connected to the attributive adjective?

Thanks
Julius

Yes, a “14-month old” is a noun, “14 months old” is an adjective phrase.

Hi, I am in Nashville, Tennessee, Music City USA :slight_smile:

I think you writing sounds fine the way it is. I think relatively simply language is most appropriate for a plaintive message like this.

Thanks a lot luschen for your prompt action. I really appreciate it very much.

PS: Is my writing style ok and understandable? I make mistakes, there is no doubt about it. I like to be corrected. Please correct my errors in my writings/ posts or wherever you find.Thanks.