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[Swapneel]

[b]Leaders like John F. Kennedy and Martin Luther King have made important contributions to the people of the United States. Name another world leader you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice.

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Mohandas karamchand Gandhi populary known as mahatma Gandhi has played a vital role in the independence of india.I think he was the most important leader during the independence movement.he was an indian who was born gujrat state of india.he was a lawer by profession.foe few years he had worked on south africa.he belived in simple living and high thinking.
Till 1947 india was ruled by Britishers by the name East india company.India means at that time consisted of india,pakistan,bangladeshand nepal.India was first ruled by different rulers in all over this region.but they had very less cooperation amongst them.They were of differnt religions.the britishers took advantage of this and started conquering the indian teritories.indian pepole had to face a lot of hardships under their tyrant rule.Lot of pepole were died during this freedom fight.
Mahatma Gandhi after returning from south africa started his freedom fight against british.his one of the famous moment was dandi march.dandi march was a movement to oppose against the tax system of british on salt.During dandi march he traveled several hundreads of kilometer with his feet and dandi i.e stick towards the sea.along with him a lot of pepole joined to support him.at at the end he reached th sea shore and prepared saltby himself and opposed the british taxation system.
His style of opposing was very unique and nonviolent famously known till today as Satyagrahto .by using this technique he has he freed india from british regime.He did alot satyaghrahs to oppose british. satyagrah was mainly consisted of fast in front of goverment offices and other important placeds.Because of him today india and pakistan have seen indpendence and pepole here can live peaceful live.his satyagrah technique is used even today by pepole all over the world.[/b]

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[Luschen]

Hi, your writing is not too bad. You only have a few grammatical errors. Your vocabulary is pretty basic though and you repeat many phrases too much. Your overall structure is not very good though. I was looking for 2 or 3 clear reasons why Gandhi was important with clarifications and examples to prove each reason. Your introduction also needs to end with a strong thesis statement stating your opinion. You can also sum up and repeat your thesis in the conclusion. This article gives a good description of what I am talking about: bookrags.com/articles/4.html.

@Swapneel

[b]Leaders like John F. Kennedy and Martin Luther King have made important contributions to the people of the United States. Name another world leader you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice.

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Mohandas karamchand{cap} Gandhi{comma} populary known as mahatma {cap}nGandhi {comma}has played {“has played” would really only work if he is still alive} a vital role in the independence of india.{cap and space after periods} I think he was the most important leader during the independence movement.he{cap} was an indian{cap} who was born [in the] gujrat state of india.he was a lawer by profession.foe[For a] few years he had worked on south africa.he belived in simple living and high thinking. {these details do not seem very relevant to the thesis - I would include a stronger thesis statement with a summary of your reasons why you think he was so important}
Till 1947 india was ruled by [the] Britishers by the name [through the] East india company.{this topic sentence should give your first reason supporting your thesis} India means at that time consisted of [the territory now forming] india,pakistan,bangladeshand nepal.{capitalize all these] India was first ruled by different rulers in[from] all over this region.but they had very less[little] cooperation amongst them.They were of differnt religions.the britishers took advantage of this and started conquering the indian teritories.indian pepole had to face a lot of hardships under their tyrant rule.Lot of people {sp} were died during this freedom fight. {I realize you have to give some background, but this is way too much in my opinion. The prompt asks what makes this person so important and this paragraph does not really answer that question}
Mahatma Gandhi after returning from south africa started his freedom fight{“freedom fight” is repetitive here} against [the] british.his one of the [his] famous moment[s ] was [the] dandy march{caps}.dandi march was a movement to oppose against the tax system of british on salt.During [the] dandi march he traveled several hundreads of kilometer[s ] with his feet[by foot] and dandi i.e stick[, a type of walking stick, ] towards the sea.along with him a lot of pepole joined [the walk] to support him.at at the end he reached th[e ] sea shore and prepared saltby himself and opposed the british taxation system. {this is a vivid example, but what does it show about Gandhi and why he was important? You need to be more explicit in telling this}
His style of opposi[tion] was very unique and nonviolent [method] famously known till today as Satyagrahto .by using this technique he has he freed india from [the] british regime.He did a lot [of] satyaghrahs to oppose [the] british. satyagrah was mainly consisted of fast[ing] in front of goverment offices and other important placeds[places].Because of him{comma} today india and pakistan have seen indpendence and people{sp} here can live peaceful live[s ] .his satyagrah technique is used even today by people{sp} all over the world.[/b]

TOEFL listening discussions: What is Dr Schmidt researching?