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[b]Leaders like John F. Kennedy and Martin Luther King have made important contributions to the people of the United States. Name another world leader you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice.

Mohandas karamchand Gandhi populary known as mahatma Gandhi has played a vital role in the independence of india.I think he was the most important leader during the independence movement.he was an indian who was born gujrat state of india.he was a lawer by profession.foe few years he had worked on south africa.he belived in simple living and high thinking.
Till 1947 india was ruled by Britishers by the name East india company.India means at that time consisted of india,pakistan,bangladeshand nepal.India was first ruled by different rulers in all over this region.but they had very less cooperation amongst them.They were of differnt religions.the britishers took advantage of this and started conquering the indian teritories.indian pepole had to face a lot of hardships under their tyrant rule.Lot of pepole were died during this freedom fight.
Mahatma Gandhi after returning from south africa started his freedom fight against british.his one of the famous moment was dandi march.dandi march was a movement to oppose against the tax system of british on salt.During dandi march he traveled several hundreads of kilometer with his feet and dandi i.e stick towards the sea.along with him a lot of pepole joined to support at the end he reached th sea shore and prepared saltby himself and opposed the british taxation system.
His style of opposing was very unique and nonviolent famously known till today as Satyagrahto .by using this technique he has he freed india from british regime.He did alot satyaghrahs to oppose british. satyagrah was mainly consisted of fast in front of goverment offices and other important placeds.Because of him today india and pakistan have seen indpendence and pepole here can live peaceful live.his satyagrah technique is used even today by pepole all over the world.[/b]

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Hi, your writing is not too bad. You only have a few grammatical errors. Your vocabulary is pretty basic though and you repeat many phrases too much. Your overall structure is not very good though. I was looking for 2 or 3 clear reasons why Gandhi was important with clarifications and examples to prove each reason. Your introduction also needs to end with a strong thesis statement stating your opinion. You can also sum up and repeat your thesis in the conclusion. This article gives a good description of what I am talking about: