Please correct my English..just where the brackets are..Thank you

Hello I need to submit my translation from French to English, as I am not native speaker I cant tell if this sounds really English…can you just correct sentences which sounds odd or there is a grammar mistake? I wasnt sure what sounds better so I put in brackets options. Thank you.

Good life in London?
The majority of the French expatriates live(s) in the capital, where everything(all, anything) seems (to be) possible. But the accommodation can be very expensive.
Here, in London, the French are everywhere, in the restaurants, nightclubs, but also in (the) banks and insurance companies, without forgetting (not forgetting, not to mention) football teams and even (alike, same) the film industry.
Amelie Walker, early forties (about forty), knows London like the back of her hand. This talented and hardworking woman is a manager in a suburban company. (business, industry, firm) "Few years ago the French were rares (infrequent) in London because they did not speak the language, but they are much more numerous nowadays (today there are much more of them?).
London has completely changed during last fifteen years. Out of 400 000 French living in Great Britain, more than 200 000 live in the capital. Among (amongst) them there are a lot of expatriates whose company pay(s) the accommodation. Althoug young people (graduates or unemployed(s) ) come(s) in large numbers. Normally, for quite short period (time), between 4 months and two years. They come especially (mostly, above all) because of (the) temporary jobs which are so easy to find here.
In United Kingdom, to work (work, working) Wednesdays for one employer and evenings for the another (other) is normal in the country where one quarter of the active population work(s) part-time job(s). Therefore it is quite (absolutely) possible to do academic studies and to get the working experience at the same time. However, the French have (has) sometimes tendency to forget that the accommodation is extremely expensive. Students and bachelors are able to choose house-sharing, very popular in Great Britain, but for families the choice is often determined by the proximity (closennes, nearness) of french school, situated in the upmarket neighbourhood of (in) Kensington, where the rent is outrageous.

Good life in London?
The majority of the French expatriates live in the capital, where anything seems possible. However, the accommodation can be very expensive.
Here, in London, the French are everywhere, in the restaurants, nightclubs, but also in banks and insurance companies, not to mention football teams and even the film industry.
Amelie Walker, who is about 40, knows London like the back of her hand. This talented and hardworking woman is a manager in a suburban company. "Few years ago the French were rarely found in London because they did not speak the language, but they are much more numerous nowadays.
London has completely changed during last fifteen years. Out of 400 000 French living in Great Britain, more than 200 000 live in the capital. Amongst them there are a lot of expatriates whose company pays for the accommodation. Furthermore, young people (graduates or unemployed) come in large numbers. Normally, for quite short period of time, between 4 months and two years. They come especially because of the temporary jobs which are so easy to find here.

In the United Kingdom, to work Wednesdays for one employer and evenings for the other other is normal in the country where one quarter of the active population works part-time jobs. Therefore it is quite possible to do academic studies and to get the working experience at the same time. However, the French sometimes have a tendency to forget that the accommodation is extremely expensive. Students and bachelors are able to choose house-sharing, which is very popular in Great Britain, but for families the choice is often determined by the proximity of French School, situated in the upmarket neighbourhood of Kensington, where the rent is outrageous.

That is my take on it, the things in bold were the things that were not in brackets but still needed to be corrected :slight_smile:

Thanks a lot youre a star! :slight_smile: