Please could someone check if there are any mistakes in this lyrics…
Please, Please, Please…
Thanks.
Let me come into your little world
Your tears don’t look like drops of rain
Give me your hands when it gets cold
But silence is the only answer again.
It’s hard to believe in that you don’t want
You just say: „I don’t believe. No. I don’t”
Waiting all the time in shimmering hope
It seems feeling this way I’ll never stop.
Every moment is the point of no return
And no one shows me where stepping stones
Sometimes I don’t know which way to turn
I roam through the night till sunrise comes.
I remember all that I’d want to forget
It can be so easy to give more then you get
5 minutes to talk, 5 minutes as such
For someone it’s trifle, for someone it means so much…
Also, look at your rhyme schemes (the pattern of rhyme), they’re different in every stanza.
Stanza 1 ABCD (possibly ABCB)
world A
rain B
cold C
again D (some pronuncitions might rhyme with rain, giving you ABCB)
Stanza 2 EFGH
want E
don’t F
hope G
stop H
Stanza 3 IJIK
return I
stones J
turn I
comes K
Stanza 4 LLMM
Forget L
get L
such M
much M
You song doesn’t have to rhyme of course, but if you want it to rhyme, then you should use a consistent rhyme scheme. As it is, the occasional rhymes seem out of place. I’m not sure if you want it to rhyme, and didn’t do a very good job of maintaining the rhyme, or if it was just some accidental rhymes. Either way is distracting.
No rules says it has to rhyme, but good writing does say that it should be clear that you either (a) don’t want rhyme or (b) want rhyme and have good control over its use.