please check my essay.thank you

[Krexma]

Some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done. Other
People prefer to take their time and live life at a slower pace. Which do
you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People differ in a way of doing things in their life. Some people make everything quickly and keep themselves always busy. Others, on the contrarily, have a slow pace lives. Personally, I belong to the second people’s type because I do not have an ability to do things quickly; I like to think before making decisions and to do everything perfectly as possible.

First and foremost, I prefer to take time planning events in advance .In this way I have a proper control and feel comfortable. For instance, the arrangement of my daughter‘s birthday celebration I started two months in advance. It was really the spectacular event and all relatives speak about it till these days. However, sometimes, I am forced to do things in a hurry, thus people think that I had better did not do it. In a nutshell, to get something done demands from me a lot of time.

Second, I would rather think twice before doing instead of finding myself regretting about things that have already done. For instance, I do not buy new clothes that do not fit me hoping one day to wear it. As a result, I do not have stuff at home, only things that I need and use. Unfortunately, thinking twice causes me to miss the good discounts, because I could not decide promptly, but it saves me money in the other cases.

Third, even it sounds trivial, I am perfectionist and like to see the best outcome which consumes a time. For instance, it took me to complete my master degree more than four years instead of regular two ones. I wanted to have the better marks, so I did some exams for several time improving my score. Additionally, I spent a lot of time trying to get the better experimental results for my thesis project. In a nutshell, the slow pace allowed me to reach my goals as I wanted.

All in all, having the slow pace life gives me opportunity to do things in the perfect way, because I am able to plan in advance and think before doing. Finally, the fact that I have enough of time makes me to feel comfortable in my life.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor of Paleontology

[Luschen]

Hi, I enjoyed reading your essay. Your structure is outstanding. A few poor word choices and trouble with articles in this one. Also, a couple odd sounding phrases. Overall very good though - I would rate this a 3.5 out of 5.

@Krexma

Some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done. Other
People prefer to take their time and live life at a slower pace. Which do
you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People differ in a[their] way of doing things in their life{“in their life” sounds redundant}. Some people make{“do” would be better} everything quickly and [always] keep themselves always busy. Others, on the contrar[y], have a slow[er] pace[d] lives.{or “have a slower pace of life”} Personally, I belong to the second people’s type because I do not have an ability to do things quickly; I like to think before making decisions and to do everything [as] perfectly as possible.

First and foremost, I prefer to take time planning{“to plan” sounds better} events in advance . In this way I have a proper control and feel comfortable. For instance, [for] {this was ok, but sounds much better with “for”} the arrangement of my daughter‘s birthday celebration I started two months in advance. It was really the [a] spectacular event {you could use the if you said for example “the spectacular event of the year”} and all relatives speak about it till these days.{“… relatives still speak about it today” is better} However, sometimes, I am forced to do things in a hurry, thus people think that I had better did not do it.{this sentence is a little unclear to me} In a nutshell, to get something done demands from me a lot of time{“advance warning” sounds better}.

Second, I would rather think twice before doing [something] instead of finding myself regretting about things that [I] have already done. For instance, I do not buy new clothes that do not fit me hoping one day to wear it[them]. As a result, I do not have [useless] stuff at home, only things that I need and use. Unfortunately, [sometimes] thinking twice causes me to miss the good discounts, because I could{use “can” here to match the tense of your other verbs} not decide promptly, but it saves me money in the other cases.

Third, even it sounds trivial, I am [a] perfectionist and like to see the best outcome {comma} which consumes a[much] time. For instance, it took me to complete my master degree more than four years {say “it took me more than four years to complete my master degree” or “to complete my master degree took me more than four years”} instead of [the] regular{“normal” is better here} two ones. I wanted to have the better marks, so I [re]did some exams for several time[s, ] improving{comma before improving or no comma and say “times to improve my score”} my score. Additionally, I spent a lot of time trying to get the better {usually use “a” before better abd use “the” before best - many betters, only one best - here you don’t have to use the “a” because results is plural} experimental results for my thesis project. In a nutshell,{in a nutshell is repetitive from paragraph one -maybe say “In short”} the slow pace allowed me to reach my goals as I wanted.

All in all, having the[a] slow pace[d] life gives me [the] opportunity to do things in the perfect way, because I am able to plan in advance and think before doing. Finally, the fact that I have enough of time makes me to feel comfortable in my life.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor of Paleontology

[Krexma]

I am grateful to you for your help.
in the sentence that was unclear i mean that sometimes when i am in a hurry i can break down devices for example in the kitchen or cook no tasty,no one wants eat it,so better not to do when i do not have enough time

[Luschen]

@Krexma

I am grateful to you for your help.
in the sentence that was unclear i mean that sometimes when i am in a hurry i can break down devices for example in the kitchen or cook no tasty,no one wants eat it,so better not to do when i do not have enough time

Sorry, I can’t resist correcting your sentence:

Sometimes when I am in a hurry I can for example break appliances in the kitchen or cook food that is not tasty so no one wants to eat it.

How about this?

However, sometimes I am forced to do something in a hurry and in these cases, the results are so poor that people think it would have been better for me not to have done it at all.

[Krexma]

Thank you.
It is always excellent after your correction.