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[Chaitalivpatel]

Topic: Modern technology is creating a single world culture.Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

In the modern world, the technology which is one of the best investigations. The various cultures of the world use technology for different purposes. The purposes may be different but use of the technology is common. I definitely believe that modern technology is creating a single world culture because it makes life easier than earlier, people have come more closer to one another.

First, it makes life easier than earlier. Such kind of comfort is needed by the every persons and their cultures. Nowadays no one want to do hard work if it is possible to complete their works easily. For example, people uses technology of mobile or internet to communication and to make life easier. There is not any other option except use of technology and it is regardless to cultural variations.

Second, a culture is what in which all individuals have same language to speak, same dress styles to wear, same weather to live, same varieties of food to eat. Because of technology modern people have not forgot their native language, but able to speak many languages other than native language. Moreover, they have become broad minded and ready to accept rules and regulation of the different cultures. For example, because of technology of internet, a person can see different culture at home .They can lean different language at home. By using various communicating websites they can talk with the person of different cultures. They can share with them their ideas about particular things and can share even their daily routine. It seems if they were living in the same cultures.

To sum up, there are many religion, beliefs and mentalities who made different cultures separately apart, but as there is advancement in modern technology take people closer and make world smaller that earlier unite a world into a single culture .

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[Luschen]

Hi, pretty good essay. I thought your second paragraph sounded a little unnatural, but your final two paragraphs were much better. I think I would give this a 3.5 out of 5.

@Chaitalivpatel

Topic: Modern technology is creating a single world culture.Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

In the modern world, the technology which is one of the best investigations.{This does not make sense, do you mean “innovations”?} The various cultures of the world use technology for different purposes. The purposes may be different but use of the technology is common. I definitely believe that modern technology is creating a single world culture because it makes life easier than earlier[before and], people have come more closer to one another.

First, [technology] makes life easier than [in] earlier [times]. Such[These] kind[s ] of comfort is[are] needed by the every persons and their cultures. Nowadays no one want[s ] to do hard work if it is possible to complete their works easily [instead]. For example, people uses technology of mobile [phones] or internet to communicat[e ] and to make life easier. There is not any other option except [the] use of technology and it is [ir]regardless to[of] cultural variations.

Second, a culture is what[one] in which all individuals have [the] same language to speak, [the] same dress styles to wear, [the] same weather to live, [and the] same varieties of food to eat. Because of technology modern people have not forgot[ten] their native language, but [are now] able to speak many languages other than [their] native language. Moreover, they have become broad minded and ready to accept rules and regulation[s ] of the different cultures. For example, because of [the] technology of internet, a person can see different culture[s ] at home .They can lean{sp} different language at home. By using various communicat[ion] websites they can talk with the person[people] of different cultures. They can share with them their ideas about particular things and can share even their daily routine. It seems if they were living in the same cultures. {this paragraph sounds much better to me than your second paragraph}

To sum up, there are many religion[s ], beliefs and mentalities who[which] made[separate] different cultures separately apart, but as there is advancement[s ] in modern technology take[bring] people closer and make [the] world smaller tha[n] earlier [, they] unite a world into a single culture .

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