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Topic: We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes.
What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependent on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits.

As we move into twenty-first century , computers have an essential part of our everyday life. Many scientists agree that it is the best and most useful invention which is made by humankind. One of the famous american politician Kent Conrad quoted that ‘ Access to computer and the internet has become a basic need for education in our society.’ We are now so dependent on computers that is hard to imagine what things would be today like without them.

To begin with, the predictions about new usage of computer. İn our modern society , especially in the USA , there are a lot of researchers about the computers. One of them presented to public in 2010, the Project based on non-driver cars. Only a intelligent and excellent computer programme which is a kind of navigation tool, work an find the way. For instance in Turkey , the most famous ıt company Escort made a plan about this issue what’s more they sign a agreement with most popular car company, Tofaş. In the future computers will be used to create bigger an even more sophisticated projects related to our everyday life.

On the other hand , some people are against to computer. They think that it is drawback outweigh it is advantanges. Popular American writer Andy Rooney said that ‘ computers may save time but they sure waste a lot of paper . About 98 percent of everything printed out by a computer is garbage that one ever reads.’ İn our modern World also there are lots of aircraft fly by computer. One day if they didn’t work properly, there would be a disaster.

Taking everything into account , computer make our life easy. The usage of computer are increase rapidly day by day. However we should ensure that we are still in a position where we are able to control technology.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor of Physics

Hi, your essay was pretty good. You addressed the first part of the prompt fairly well with your automatic car example. I don’t think you really said enough about whether our dependence is good or bad though. Your last body paragraph was pretty weak. Your writing is not too bad, with a pretty good vocabulary, although you have some grammatical errors and a few unclear and awkward sounding phrases. Overall, I would rate this a band 6.