Please asses my GRE argumentative essay

“According to a recent report, cheating among college and university students is on the rise. However, Groveton College has successfully reduced student cheating by adopting an honor code, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton’s honor code replaced a system in which teachers closely monitored students; under that system, teachers reported an average of thirty cases of cheating per year. In the first year the honor code was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey, a majority of Groveton students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without. Thus, all colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton’s in order to decrease cheating among students.”

In this letter, the writer recommends that in order to diminish cheating among students, colleges and universities should adopt an honor code. In an honor code approach the behavior of the students during examination is not directly observed by teachers, and students, themselves, report cheaters to the teacher. To support this recommendation, the writer employs a recent research in which the increase rate of cheating among students has been reported. Furthermore, the writer points out that Goverton College, hereinafter is referred to as GC, has took advantage of the honor code system to reduce the number of the cheats. From my vantage point, the recommendation relies on a series of unsubstantiated assumptions, which each of them can be questioned in one way or another, and therefore is unpersuasive as it stands.

The first problem with the argument is that it is not stated how many people took part in the reported study. As you know, the greater the number of the people in the sample, the more reliable and valid the findings are. Maybe only ten people participated; could we conclude that the cheating is on the rise? Hence, the findings of such a research would be neither trustworthy nor convincing.

Even assuming that enough students took part in the reported study, there is still another problem with the sample. Without knowing whether the sample of the student was representative to the overall population of the students, it is impossible to confidently apply the study to the all students. Assume that the recent report is failed distinguish the real changes of cheating among students, and in fact, it is on reduction; in this matter, the writer’s conclusion about applying an honor code would be obsolete.

In addition, even if we assume that the number of cheats is elevating, the nature of the honor code is highly questionable itself. Deem the situation in which student have promised to not report the name of cheaters to the educators. Or perhaps, some students are afraid of reporting due to the severe repercussions, such as the threats by cheaters. Even it is not impossible that the cheaters also notify the faculty members that not-cheated students have been cheating during the exam. Therefore the honor code system may have brought us more bane than boon. Either scenario would give credence to the fact that the honor code is highly controversial and needs to further discussion.

Even assuming that there is no defect regarding the honor code system, another problem with the argument is that the reduction in the rate of cheaters can be attributable to adoption of the mentioned system in GC. Just as a likely, perhaps the GC has been inundated with professional and talented students during the time an honor code was applied; and that is why the number of cheater were diminishing. Without ruling out such alternative explanation for the reduction in the number of cheaters, the author cannot defend the conclusion that the best remedy to solve the problem of the cheating growth among students.

In coclusion, the recommendation relies on doubtful assumptions, which render it unconvincing as is. “thanks Luschen”. To bolster the recommendation, the author should provide clear evidence that the number of cheaters is on the rise. Also, the condition of Groventon College is the same as other colleges in terms of students’ diversity, culture, and age; hence, makes the CG a decent sample that the findings of survey in this college could be applied as a probable results of other colleges. Moreover, the writer should convince me that the only factor that results in the reduction of the cheat is applying the honor code system by rending reliable evidences.

Thank you in advance for your time and consideration.
Mahsa Ghaffari