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Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There has been a heated debate concerning the necessity of spending times on doing things that they do not fond of doing. In fact, there is a growing sentiment that put more emphasis on the importance of enjoying doing any activities that you are really love. At the same time, there is a solid body of opinion that dislike the opposite side from the statement that they think is true. In my opinion, I concur with the former for two primary reasons.
First of all, from time to time we all do something we do not want and life forces us for these actions. For example, without doing exercises it is impossible to have a great and healthy body but it is up to everyone, lie on a sofa or go to the gym. Also person`s character plays significant role, and it depends on it. Why some achieve high results and others not? As a rule reaching great results may face you with many obstacles on the way but, eventually, persistent work will increase your skills, and raise you on the top. Nevertheless, the way to the success might be challenging, though not very enjoyable.
Secondly, we should do all things to become aware of the real result. Sometimes we preconceive things without any information or experience. We are not able to understand the real quality of things if we do not try them. For instance, without tasting the flavor of honey you cannot announce that it is tasteful or revolting. If you try some activities, it could lead to have some new interests for you.
On the other hand, some may argue that the two above reasons are not persuasive enough to demonstrate the statement, providing evidence that people easily get bored with the things which they would not love to do, always groan and it makes the other people feel a little bit annoying. However, we cannot reach the conclusion that the other sides are also wrong without considering concrete examples.
In conclusion, there are a lot of people with different characters and opinions. Doubtless, it is up to everyone to do something enjoyable or not. However, we have to struggle to show who we are, and what are we made of.
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