[color=red]some people believe a country will benefit greatly by a high percentage of young people go to university,others argue that it only leads to graduate unemployment.discuss both and give your own opinion
Today,it is becoming increasingly easy for youths to go to university.Some individuals think the society will benefit from this,while others concern that this will leads to graduate unemployment .
With a sufficient supply of education resource in contemporary society , young people should have their rights to go to university if they want to.A college is society in miniature.In the college,they can acquire knowledge and skills,which will help them more qualified to get a good job and to contribute to the societal well-being.For instance,young people can get more information about career planning during their college life.By that,these newbies know what they can do and what they are interested in so that they will become more efficiently and motivatied.Besides,subjects such as arts and sports in the university are beneficial to young people and render them mould their character.
Definitely we cannot deny the fact that graduate unemployment is common in these days.But I do not think this is because of a high percentage of young people going to university.There would be graduate unemployment even if universities do not accept students at all.It is the quality of schooling rather than the policy itself that we should pay attention to.That is to say,the best way to combat the problem is improving the quality of schooling ,such as introducing more advanced machine,recruiting better lecturers ,and so on.
Overall,it is acceptable that more and more young people go to university,as long as the teaching quality goes upwards at the same time.And we will see many good effects to the society instead of graduate unemployment.
I think Kitos means you should add a space between your punctuation like this. If you are not sure what I mean, you could copy your essay into Microsoft Word with the check spelling and grammar on, it will suggest the correction for your punctuation Hope it could help!
Good evening,Kitosdad.
I have correceted my essay, and here I send it again. Thanks for your last advice.
[color=red]some people believe a country will benefit greatly by a high percentage of young people go to university,others argue that it only leads to graduate unemployment.discuss both and give your own opinion
Today, it is becoming increasingly easy for youths to go to university. Some individuals think the society will benefit from this, while others concern that this will leads to graduate unemployment.
With a sufficient supply of education resource in contemporary society, young people should have their rights to go to university if they want to. A college is society in miniature. In the college, they can acquire knowledge and skills, which will help them more qualified to get a good job and to contribute to the societal well-being. For instance, young people can get more information about career planning during their college life. By that, these newbies know what they can do and what they are interested in so that they will become more efficiently and motivatied. Besides,subjects such as arts and sports in the university are beneficial to young people and render them mould their character.
Definitely we cannot deny the fact that graduate unemployment is common in these days. But I do not think this is because of a high percentage of young people going to university. There would be graduate unemployment even if universities do not accept students at all. It is the quality of schooling rather than the policy itself that we should pay attention to. That is to say, the best way to combat the problem is improving the quality of schooling, such as introducing more advanced machine,recruiting better lecturers, and so on.
Overall, it is acceptable that more and more young people go to university, as long as the teaching quality goes upwards at the same time. And we will see many good effects to the society instead of graduate unemployment.
Good evening,Kitosdad.
I have correceted my essay, and here I send it again. Thanks for your last advice.
Some people believe a country will benefit greatly by having a high percentage of young people go to university, others argue that it only leads to graduate unemployment. Discuss both and give your own opinion
Today, it is becoming increasingly easy for people to gain entry into university. Some individuals think society will benefit from this, while others concern that this will lead to graduate unemployment.
With a sufficient supply of education resources in contemporary society, young people should have their rights to go to university if they want to. A college is a society in miniature. In the college, they can acquire knowledge and skills which will help them to become more qualified to get a good job and to contribute to the societal well-being. For instance, young people can get more information about career planning during their college life. By that, these newbies know what they can do and what they are interested in, so that they will become more efficient and motivated. Subjects such as arts and sports in the university are beneficial to young people and mould their characters.
Definitely we cannot deny the fact that graduate unemployment is common in these days. But I do not think this is because of a high percentage of young people going to university. There would be graduate unemployment even if universities do not accept students at all. It is the quality of schooling rather than the policy itself that we should pay attention to. That is to say, the best way to combat the problem is improving the quality of schooling, such as introducing more advanced machines, recruiting better lecturers, and so on.
Overall, it is acceptable that more and more young people go to university, as long as the teaching quality goes upwards at the same time, and we will see many good effects to the society instead of graduate unemployment.
Not bad Dyhf. I hope you will take the time to review this edited work. Many mistakes that you have made were so easily avoidable.
Hope it could help!