Meet with writer, blogger Rizwan Ahmed Memon

Hello everyone,

I am Rizwan Ahmed Memon. I am a writer. I found this forum four or five years ago, but I never posted anything. From today I am starting posting my writings, and I want you to review my writings and tell me whatever edits, changes you think should be made in my writings. I will welcome your language help.

I have a blog where I post my writings. Please visit it: rizwanahmedmemon.blogspot.com/

Here is my recent poem:

In the Moonlight of May
by Rizwan Ahmed Memon

We met in the moonlight of May.
A cuckoo sang a melodious song to make our night romantic.
The moles on her cheek were dim like stars around the moon.
Her bright, soft, velvety, snow-like face kept me awake all the night long.

On that night suddenly I got lost in the forest of her long hair.
Then she whispered the way in my ear.
She put her light hands in my hands and brought me back.
She hugged me and promised to stay with me forever.

The only change I’d suggest is
‘…all night long’. You don’t need ‘all the night long’.