Luck has nothing to do with success *essay*

Topic:
“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

Nowadays, there are many movies, which are based on a true story. These movies are produced in order to prove for the observer that people have to work hard so as to get what they want. Gernerally speaking, people have to realize that money can not be found on the tree. Hence, I believe that people have to work hard in order to reach the aim.

First of all, it is significant to consider the finance field. Mature people usually have a job, and some of them work more that one job, because they want to earn more money. Other mature people are too lazy for working, hence, they suppose that luck is exsit. By way of example, there are two kinds of gamling; the first is to fill the lottery tickt and wait for the result. The second, is to gamble in the casino.

In addition of the importance of the the finance, people have to be realistic. They must realize and understand that the result, which they are waiting for, will not occur if they don’t get up and work for it. For instance, many people get “luck” by finding money on the street, but they have to understand that this money was dropped from another human, so it could happen to any one.

On the other hand, I would call a specific kind of people “lucky”. In my view there are two kind of people who are fortunate; first, people who have a rich a parents, in condition that they are aware that their parents worked hard for this budget. Second, people who are simply happy.
There is a movie I watched which based on a true story called; “The pursuit of happiness”, which talks about a father who is very poor and he was homeless for a period of time,but he wanted to provide his son the best. Hence he worked hard and found a great job, and currently he is a milioner.

By way of conclustion, based on the arguments explored above, I would like to emphasize that working hard is the path for success. There is a meaningful quote that says; “you can have a result, or excuse, Not both”.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two students (1)

Hi Eliasbit, I thought your writing was good, but your arguments and examples were not that convincing to me in this one. I didn’t see the point in a couple of your examples and others were not tied back to the thesis explicitly enough. I sort of understood where you were trying to go in each of your body paragraphs, but you never quite got there. Your mechanics were very good though, with only a few errors. I would have to rate this a 3.5 out of 5.

Thank you, next time I’ll try to be more clear with the examples.