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Topic: Hanging out is a good way to relax and unwind. Do the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?
These days, people have many different styles of relaxation and unwinding. One of the great ones is hanging out. This essay will argue that the benefits of this way are more remarkable than the drawbacks.
It is clear that hanging out has some considerable positive effects. The greatest advantage of this is relieving stress effectively. When people hang out after work, study or in their free time, they could temporarily leave their pressures behind to enjoy chatting, eating, drinking and sharing funny moments with friends or family. Another additional benefit of this is that it helps people improve their relationships. The majority of people today seem to always be busy with their own lives and do not have much chance to meet others. Therefore, it would be a good opportunity to communicate with fellows, relatives or sometimes make new friends when people hang out.
Nevertheless, this way has not only good sides but also some downsides. First, it is a time-consuming activity. Sometimes it could take so much time just for hanging out instead of doing some extra positive activities such as playing sports, reading, or self-caring. Second, it will be very costly if people go to and spend too much on luxurious places. It would mean that they would get more pressure to make money when back to work. Third, it will be unhealthy if people eat too much junk food or get drunk when hanging out. Because food and drink are things affecting human inside body directly. However, these demerits could be controlled by people’s moderation in this activity.
In conclusion, although hanging out has some drawbacks existing, it appears to me that the advantages of this way are more notable than the disadvantages.