Ielts part2: more people choose to live alone, negative impact on communities

Hi Luschen,

Nowadays more people are choosing to live with friends or alone rather than with their families. This trend is likely to have a negative impact on communities.
To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

These days, more and more people prefer living with their friends or even alone to living with their families. I definitely agree that this would have an adverse effect on communities.

One of the main reasons that people opt for a life with their friends or even alone is for freedom. They can have their own favorable life on which nobody can make any influence. In fact, many people who I have known live alone as they would like no one tells them to do anything in their own house. When they still lived with their parents, they used to get complaints or be asked to do several things when they were not really interested in doing such as washing the dishes right away after dinner or cleaning the house at weekends while they wanted to go out or network with friends.

On the other hand, this way of living would have a profound effect on communities. Firstly, when children move out to live with their friends, they think that they have grown up and are mature enough to be able to take good care of themselves while living apart from their families. So parents should not intervene into their own lives outside the house. As a matter of fact, they are easily affected by the bad behaviors of their close friends or of those they are living with. In the long run, they do not consider their families as important as those used to be. Without them, they are also doing well in many respects of life. Therefore, the relationships between them and their families tend to be broken down. As a consequence, they could not learn any invaluable lessons or tips on life from their parents. The communities are then likely to become many separated parts in society due to the fact that people tend to live their own lives without viewing communities as a whole as something that they need to develop or make them stronger.

In a nutshell, despite the fact that many people like living alone or with their friends, I am totally convinced that this is going to be a negative development. Parents and governments must take steps to improve this situation and prevent it from being more popular among the young.

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Hi Inuyasha, I think you did a pretty good job with this essay. You have addressed the prompt well and provided some good support. Some more specific examples might be helpful though. Your grammar and word choice are not bad, but a few of your sentences were a little unnatural sounding and once in awhile confusing. Overall, I would rate this a band 6.

Hi Luschen,

First of all, thank you very much for your correction.
Here are again some improvements I made, please take a look at them
They can have their own favorable life{“favorable life” sounds odd - what do you mean?} : I mean living a life as they always wanted, I have a few phrases in my mind which are their own favorite life, or fulfilling life, or favored life.
they do not consider their families as important as those used to be. {this sounds awkward - is “those” meaning families?} yes I use those to referring to families. But I myself also find it odd but how about : … as important as it used to be/ as important as used to be.
I suppose the last sentence of the conclusion sounds odd because I did not mention how popular living apart from families is and used it at the end. So it should be … prevent it from becoming a trend in the future.
Thanks.