I was trying to write an TOEFL essay about Internet...


I was trying to write an toefl essay about Internet and following is my first Para. Could you please advise my standard in English and what need to be changed?

“Internet usage has drastically increased over the recent deacdes due to the immense improvement in the technology over the times. Most of them are able to get the information within a short span of time as compared with the past where they need to wait until the delivery of mail in their doorstep. But it also has it’s own drawbacks, as the manual and physical activities has considerably reduced due to the invetion and people suffer from lack of physical work and excess of mental strain.”

Please advise. Thanks a lot.

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